I wake up each day
even now
years later
expecting to see him
walking through that door.
His death took us all by surprise.
Never before had I known death so personally.
It's cruel cold hand
had never touched me before.
I remember so vividly
how my life was before.
As child,
I saw life through a childs eye.
However, on that day
all things changed.
No longer a child
I had those years stolen from me.
No longer would he hold me in his arms,
protect me from those monsters under my bed.
Watch me walk down the isle on my graduation day.
We missed so much
not having him around.
His laugh,
his cigars,
his dreams of a life worth living
with his family.
I miss him
still
to this day
I dream of him
walking through that door.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie (know my world) as i have known yours by solitarytear.
300 points, ended September 16, 2008, 7 entries
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Oh!
This is so powerful! It brought tears to my eyes & hit my heart hard! Sounds like even though [if this is based on fact!] that you had a loving relationship that was deep though short. I loved my Dad deeply, but our relationship was always less than I'd hoped. We started to get close a month before he died!
You just reminded me of how much I miss not being able to get to the core of our difficulties & how much I still long for him. He died in 1997! There are always places in our heart for those we love. 
I love this poem from start to finish. It draws the reader in & your words are penned so well that it's 'familiar' to all who've lost a dear parent! 
Bravo! I'm sure you'll do marv in the contest. Love that pix. 
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Actually this is based on truth. I lost my dad in an accident when I was 17 years old. And to this day... I dream and often think that I have seen him walk in our front door. He use to work out in his garage. he would smoke his cigars out there and you could smell them on him when he walked in the house. Oh how I hated the smell of those cigars.
I think that when you write about something familiar it is always a good write. It's cuz you can associate with it. Know what I mean.
thanks for all those wonderful comments on my poem. I am oh so glad that you liked it.
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Wonderful
Very well done. So sad, but very creative. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is a sad truth of life,
your memories however seem to be very vivid and beautiful
touchy and heartfelt.
well done my friend
God bless...
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i love this poem and am very sorry for your loss.....it dose not cover the the topic of this contest -
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oops I misunderstood. I thought that it was about your loss of something. Not a sense of some kind. Oops. Sorry.
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Great write, very touching.
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Forgot the applause
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Wow, fantastic
This is really a wonderfull write, it speaks of the loss with profound emotion. I can feel the loss that still walks with you, Blessings John
I am always with you daughter
Misty image by your side
Whisphered words softly spoken
As in the shadows there I hide
I saw you walk that isle proud
Upon your graduation day
I protected you from the mosters
Who on little girls prey
I will allways walk with you
Holding your hand within mine
Speaking in your sleepy dreams
And in the poetry that you rhyme
So smile for me my little girl
For you light of my soul
Remember that I am watching
Where ever you may go
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You could never upset me with beautiful words like you have spoken here. I lost my father a long time. I was a 17 year old child then. I am an adult now. And while it is still somewhat painful I can deal with it now. I had a lot of trouble dealing with it then. Thanks for your lovely words.
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i'm very sorry for your loss, it's beautiful.
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Awwwwwwwww I know this pain only to well ~ I too lost my dad. This is a wonderful display of true heartfelt emotion ~ it brought tears to my eyes best of luck in the contest
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