It was some time later
through hours of suffering,
that I was a wedding guest.
In the dim hours before the cock-crow,
as the sky alit in a fiery veil
sparrows sang from near and far,
as his spirit moved through the land.
Though the minor aches and pain of age
had caused me woe, and grief,
I was so awed by this sight
as soon the cock would crow.
And down the isle strolled the bride,
with an ancient, grimly man
wearing a bushy long, wiry beard
in a mariner's garb.
Her beauty healed my woes,
as they neared towards the alter,
(where the bride-groom stood)
waiting patient, for his bride.
And it struck me then and there,
that mariner upon her arm,
could be that of Coleridge's Rime
who blessed the shining stars.
Now the cock did crow,
and I awoke from this dream
no pain within my arms, nor legs,
only the memory of that dream
laid as a blessing upon my lips.
Author notes
Trying to recreate the same feel of the prompt/poem, and tipping my hat to Coleridge and his "rime of the ancient mariner." Hope you enjoy!
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/474-Samuel-Taylor-Coleridge-The-Rime-Of-The-Ancient-Mariner
A contest entry
- CONTEST: SPIRITUAL by Fransb by FransB.
750 points, ended September 15, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know How this makes you feel, what do you think?
Comments
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I agree whole heartedly
with MargretG that this poem is more than a dream. Its presentation forces one to read and re-read, but not because it is a 'difficult' write. You have succeeded to portray phantacy in a subtle manner. Thanks for entering into this competition. Frans
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This is a pleasant dream, and one which persists after waking. There are some allegorical images which push this poem out of the category of a mere dream. It is an intriguing poem, best of luck.
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welldone
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Rushing off to work,
but I'll return to your poem over the weekend. Thanks for the entry. Frans -
Goodness sakes, I am in awe. I just love reading your works you have a fine poetic mind Tirrell Best wishes to you always my friend
Cindy
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A beautiful free verse metered work in metaphor of natures risen and sitting sun in marriage.And a satisfying lover of the sea dream giving peace to the worrisome. I hope my interpretations are as the author intent.
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Wow! And feeling you did create! I find this poem to be captivating. I love the dramatic Volta as it was all just a dream. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you, and yes, you are quite right--Thank you
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