wren hops, tree flutters -
leaf learns to fly
on the day it dies
the wind shepherds
wooly, unshorn clouds
to drier pastures
rippling gold river
pouring down the canyon’s mouth -
aspens of autumn
In a list
A contest entry
- HAIKU by Swan song.
550 points, ended September 16, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thank you for your kind comments as they mean a great deal to me.i am 50 years old and have never read poetry book as i am dyslexic and i dont where my words come from!if i had been encouraged more at school perhaps my life would have been different.
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I love it,what more can i say
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Excellent
It is interesting how so few words can stretch one's mind.
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The first Haiku is poignant, the final lustrous in sound and image. All three are masterful!
I think the middle one, with it's windy sounds and playful metaphor is a wonder.
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I think the last ku was awesome all of them were good
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i love autumn tine Mirthryl..love your poems too..xxx
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autumn haikus
fall is such a beautiful time of the year. this is a beautiful poem!!! -slick99 -
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Thank you for reading slick99! You're right, it is a beautiful time of year!
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three haiku...
three thumbs up!
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I love the first one, although maybe it is overcrowded with images. I like the way you have sandwiched an unconventionally-formed one between the two 5-7-5s.
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Very Good!
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An unique poem. The imagery are lovely.
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