My dear, departed darling,
Perhaps it’s too late to tell you that I finally cleared the mist from my mind.
It sits idle now, full of the crayola dust
& glitter you tracked in when you danced
so beautifully[thoughtlessly] by me.
Without you, it’s all I can do to breathe
the liquidsolidgas that batters my body.
the bruises reminding me of the glitter painted
sosocarefuly across your eyes.
The glitter that reflected every inch of my
‘perfect’ face as youyouyou
Tore my heart to shreds.
[It’s the perfect shade of misery blue && it’s cheaper by the pound]
It’s possibly the wrong time to mention that I wantneeddesire
you here by my side; highlighting every
one of our tiny imperfections,
stapled so tightly to our longlonglong list of mistakes.
Without you, it’s all I can do to see
secondsminuteshours into the future you shattered
into a million shiny pieces that fell;
like painted trash into the crowded gutter.
To be trampled by ‘well wishers’
as youyouyou tore my[our] perfect,
plastic future to shreds.
[We could’ve had the world, but baby that was just too cliché]
Maybe I’d be wrong to tell you that tonight taped your picture back together
& just criedsobbedwept for you and your
perfect pout. The c[harming], mischievous
look that threw me headoverheels.
Without you, it’s all I can do touch
the reality left scattered on the compacted
dirt floors of my heart[mind]
& no matter how many times I
dig out my dusty broom, I just can’t
bring myself to scrape away everything
that youyouyou left behind.
[Now I’m stuck with the pungent odor of rotting yesterdays]
I guess now just isn’t the time to mention that I fixed those broken strings
that once plucked out your sinful
melodies. The songs meant for only our
tornbrokenshattered hearts to sing.
Without you, it’s all I can do to hear
the fluent notes that whispered
through the darkest daysmonthsyears
of a life I never chose to live. & though I listen
with every fiber of my mindbodysoul,
I still can’t bring myself to sing the
words that youyouyou never said.
[The three perfect syllables that could never pass your swollen vocal cords]
& just maybe you’d come home if I happened to mention that I bought your favourite
ice-cream. The butter-pecan one
whose taste would linger on your lips for
hours after I had kissed it all away.
without you, it’s all I can do to taste
the candy-coated sunrises of yesterday
& somehow the world got sososmall without you here.
Our little kitchen seems so empty without
the smellsflavourssounds of the
over-enthusiastic cooking that
youyouyou once insisted upon.
[Somehow, I never got tired of the take out we replaced it with]
Is it too late to tell you that I stopped hating you
for leaving my alonebymyself
to face the condolences;
the empty promises that it would all get better.
I don’t know about you, but I
Neveeverever healed. & tonight I
just wanted to say goodbye to you,
my dear, departed darling. Before
youyouyou faded forever.
[And, for once, I’ve got nothing more too say]
Your lost, lonesome, love.
Author notes
OneLastThing--x
I tried to make this a mixture of option 2 & 4, but I'm not really sure that it worked.
Enjoy, I hope.
A contest entry
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Comments
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A Very powerful and deep write. =] Beautifully written and fantastic imagery. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
x-Pretty-Odd-x <3 -
wow, I love this. I can really feel the emotions that pour out of this. They're so heartbreaking & familiar. I love the way you've described everything and all of the details that you added. It makes the imagery so vivid and the story so real. Amazing job doll.
♥
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BEAUTIFUL
Beautiful write, i loved this so much. it's so pretty the way you worte this. keep up the awesom work your graced with good talent. i wish you the best of luck in my contat and thank you so much for entering this piece. over all i loved your whole poem but my favorite lines are:
"Perhaps it’s too late to tell you that I finally cleared the mist from my mind.
It sits idle now, full of the crayola dust
& glitter you tracked in when you danced
so beautifully[thoughtlessly] by me.
Without you, it’s all I can do to breathe
the liquidsolidgas that batters my body.
the bruises reminding me of the glitter painted
sosocarefuly across your eyes.
The glitter that reflected every inch of my
‘perfect’ face as youyouyou
Tore my heart to shreds.
[It’s the perfect shade of misery blue && it’s cheaper by the pound]"
*~*bee*~* -
"full of the crayola dust
& glitter you tracked in when you danced
so beautifully[thoughtlessly] by me."
Thats one of the many favorite parts in this piece.
Thank you so much for entering and good luck.
I'll have to check out more of your work;
I really do enjoy it.
♥
-Rainbow.
PS: Welcome to the finalists. -
this is amazeing..
i love the way you wrote it
thro im not sure about the limeted spaces but i think you ment to do that didnt you ?
great job
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