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Magnetic

Somewhere
I’m waiting;

delusional of hope
  counting,
 counter clockwise

twelve
  eleven
       ten


ticking,
   repeat
to those muffled screams,

Burn me,
    alive!


where blood slips through my veins
in your puce imaginations,
     I’ve cried
like a hurricane;

    shake me down
      till I spout you out.


drainage working cycles
to pick you up again,
I choose the inferno,
living in her basement.

where in her kind words
I’ve hidden
cast from my own mind,
fear be thy name
and I be but a coward;

     what will I feel next?

Smothered to the dials
your hand grasping
the switch,
     turn me out.

Tipping your hat like a new trend
   recycle
      recycle

but alas
I’m nonrenewable,

     Shall I call
to your back hand
 meeting my cheek,

  love me
when flesh hears thunder
and sees the gapes imprinted
on agony’s mark.

drifting away
  to drift away

I char
within your heart
         once owned.

but
I can’t say I didn’t know
for intuition
leaves a burden of mistrust,
when I loved you,
more than I could love myself;



when I still do.

Author notes

Cassie's Fault three....
broken down stove, with my feelings.

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  • imoutyo
    September 15, 2008
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    a brilliant, passionate piece; and your turn of phrase- the hat like a new trend- is wonderful.


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    SO BEAUTIFUL! VERY EMOTIONAL!!!

    It does seem we still keep on loving even when the object of our love gives us nothing but pain and suffering. Well, at least some of us go on loving, some never will love only hurt.


  • And Hyetal
    September 13, 2008

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    'I choose the inferno,
    living in her basement.'

    I was the fault of THIS! I'm honored.


  • addicted
    September 11, 2008

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    I love the end part,but being only 11,i .......its too much to take in.very deep,so good.


    WonDeRFUL
    WRITEE!!

    LOVED IT!!!


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    September 11, 2008

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    "I can’t say I didn’t know
    for intuition
    leaves a burden of mistrust,
    when I loved you,
    more than I could love myself;



    when I still do."

    I love those last lines.
    I can relate so much.
    This was fantastic.
    You are an amazing writer.
    Wish you the best of luck.


  • echo-ink
    September 11, 2008

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    This is what I have been looking for, deep, emotion, metaphor, this had it all.
    LOVED IT BUNCHES, yessa!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    aww hun
    all that raw emotion built up.. poetry releases that pain in words that reflect the inner soul and heart
    take care sweetie
    Love Julie


  • poppa
    September 11, 2008

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    Beautiful write ... full of rich imagery and heartbreaking emotion...good luck in your contest


  • MysticalRayne
    September 11, 2008

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    This is beautiful full of raw emotion ~ best of luck in your contest my dear


  • Lady Australis silver member
    September 11, 2008
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    woah,,, powerful
    love you sissy

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