Fear filters into dreams
unsettling the concrete pillars
of emotional sanctuary
Precious faith
shaken to the core
I find myself
resolved to searching haystacks
for needles of memory
so I might make sense of this
sudden rush of angst
Seeds of self doubt now looming
like storm clouds on forgotten shores
Twist the mirror
so the light may shine
from a different angle
and I'm no longer
trapped here in the haze.
Author notes
Not written about personal thoughts but from a deep understanding of how soul searching might not always reveal a positive outlook on life.
I have seen many friends struggle with periods of deep seated angst where they felt swallowed by life.
I hope this helps others who feel like this to have the courage to work through it and face the sun with a smile again.
A contest entry
- FREE VERSE--- ANY SUBJECT---1540 POINTS ALMOST NO RULES GOLD GETS 1000 POINTS COME SHOW ME WHAT YOU CAN DO, YESSA! by echo-ink.
1450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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A very beautiful and encouraging poem. Congratulations on your HM.
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nice work i love how you referd to finding your memories as a needle in a stack some times they can be hard to find cant they. well nice write i loved it.
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Twist the mirror
so the light may shine
from a different angle
and I'm no longer
trapped here in the haze
breath-taking para here.
you built up from the first stanza onwards and at the climax (last stanza), you brought a positive light to end the poem.
nicely done (:
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Almost like a #2 to one of the poems I wrote yesterday.. great work.. very inspirational and full of insight. As always great rhythm and flow my dear friend!
Love,
~Krys~
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Ah! Breathing a sigh as I read this is profoundly amazing! The imagery, the visuals and the deep thought that went into this astounds me...Bravo! Keep penning!
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thank you for such a wonderful comment, its always pleasing to know others have enjoyed my work. I try to be a little different with each piece I write so that I don't become locked into one particular style.
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You have captured the feeling of this in such a way as to make anyone stop and think. I really, really like the imagery. The last stanza ties the piece together in a perfect package.
I wish I could write free verse, but for some reason I just can't grasp it. You did a wonderful job, thanks so much for the link and congrats on your HM.
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thanks so much for your comment, it's greatly appreciated, but it pleases me more to know that the words were enjoyable to read. thanks again my friend.
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WoW,
I loved this, thank you so much for entering it.
finals...Yessa!
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glad you liked it, thank you kindly for the HM.
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brilliant
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thank you so much for the confidence boosting comment, sincerely appreciated
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I love the message here and the excellent way that you have expressed it...You are so talented, Cuz and your talent shines here, as always
I am so proud of you
Bravo
Lynda
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