Oh, how she wants be be loved,
She has lost her faith
in the God up above,
She's on the outside and she's
looking in. She'd do anything
To be standing in the shoes you're in.
She wears long sleeves in the summertime,
She takes takes long walks,
Just to pass the time.
She has no where to go, no where to be,
Oh, the things she would show you,
If you could only see.
She floats in the shadows of lost dreams,
And she swims in the oceans of tears fallen at night,
She yearns for the love
That she has never felt,
And she curses the gods for this hand
that she has been dealt.
She knows she is all alone,
There is no one to hold her,
Her tears fall, but there is no one
to dry them. Her screams ring loud,
But are lost in the silence of eternity.
She knocks, but all the doors are locked.
Author notes
Option 2 :]
Suicide Awareness Month Contest: Option 4 -hotpinkpenguin :]
A contest entry
- Suffering from Depression, and dealing with it.... by Beautiful-N-Broken.
600 points, ended September 12, 2008, 12 entries
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Any comments or things I could to do improve this are greatly appreciated :)
Comments
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Beautiful write, holds a place in my heart. i loved this i can relate. i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering this piece. i really liked the lines:
"She wears long sleeves in the summertime,
She takes takes long walks,
Just to pass the time.
She has no where to go, no where to be,
Oh, the things she would show you,
If you could only see."
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Beautiful
Very depressing, i've been there. But i could never have explained as you have here. This has great imagery and just simply a wonderful write. Thanks for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck!!! keep up the great work! -
I can feel the hurt in this, I've been through it so many times and find it hard to pull myself back sometimes. Very good write, thanks for entering the contest and good luck in it.
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Psh I can't think of something to improve this it such a good poem. I love the emotion in it. Great write
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thank you very much :] this made me happy
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