bruised little fingers make their
way to where the blades slashed
with grunts and sweaty
salt flavored drips colored with
screams from her parch riddled
over-used mouth~~~
Stretched like the jaw bone of an
ass as he plunged his hard stinkin'
cock into her torn gateway
and he ahhhhhed
thrusting her rib cage to the
beats of his ego
and wiped crimson red onto his snot-rag
with shaking fingers from his good ole time
cry...what the fuck for?
I won't, eye ...smile . sweetly while
the beasts parade their
cum soaked balls round-a-bout the ever
going parties of my mother
happy trails to you
and they do this because why?
so I put an order in to the big guy
upstairs, but the waiting takes my
little wind away~~~
progressive steps to my attic
let me hide in the shadows...
...sometimes
and nails that
jag into my bone fleshened hunger
teach me yet another fucking lesson
DON'T TRUST, so I say FUCK YOU
'cause they'll never pull me down
fuck me and use me all you want
I will smile 'cause many live in here
we hold out fingers that point > > >
and I wait
and I'm still waiting
and they're still fucking me
Author notes
Prompt: Child abuse
Pre write # 2 Thrustin' Grunts
Fresh write # 2 Cracks
This is a true story of part of my childhood
1 Gold
1 Bronze
A contest entry
- WTF? Cinnarry, Look at this Shit!!!!! 4,000 Points! by PerVirtuous.
4000 points, ended September 28, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [Contest] Wake up to Abuse - Prewrites Welcome by Miss Faerie.
700 points, ended February 8, 56 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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550 points, ended February 18, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Well, What did you think?
Comments
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Pretty good... wasn't explosive though.... It was kindda angry... But the anger didnt explode off of the page... thanks for entering
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You deserved the gold on this one. Not only is it heart-breaking, it's beautiful because it's so raw and ugly and real. It made me want to throw up a little, which is always the sign of an effective poem. Great write, and I wish there was something better to say than, "I'm sorry."
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oh my.
this is graphic.
but it's what i asked for.
kudos.
and i'm sorry that happened.
guess we all have a story that will make someone cringe.
thanks for entering
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Jesus. This made me really sick.
It was effective, it showed pain and degredation and made me want to commit murder.
Shari
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It poems like these that make me want to hunt down those bastards who do these things and show them what they've done. Its horrible to think this happens every day and that most of the time we sit by and never notice until later and the child is old enough to distinguish whit is wrong.
I watched Georgia Rule yesterday, and as much as I dont like Lindsey Lohan, the movie made me cry, and reading this poem reminded me of that movie.
I truely do empathise with you and others who suffer the same pain and I wish something could be done. I dont know how else to say it without sounding cliche. Its good to hear though that you are trying to cope with it. My best wishes to you
~xoxo
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Wow, WOw, wow! what else can i say. I am so sorry. I can relate to every word of this so well. I am so sorry for all your pain. Your words are so powerful and intense. I just wish i could take your pain away. I want you to know that if you ever need to talk i am here for you. Thank you so much for entering my contest
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Thank you, Thank you so much,
These things happened a long time ago, and yes...even after all these years, I still have my bad days...
You are so kind and loving to offer to talk to me about this, If I ever need to, I will remember your great compassion and kindness.
Love, Bell,
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Congratulations on your gold in my contest. It was deserved. This poem felt like a kick in the gut that left a lasting bruise. It takes great talent to write that way.
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Wow. Just wow.
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Oh hell yeah...
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Wonderful
A great creation for the theme. Best of luck in the contest.
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To be honest this poem made me cry, but i liked it alot. I cant imagine... im sorry
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Hi sweetie, not to worry, it was a long time ago, I'm all betterer now, K's?
Love you, and where have you been for forever?
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I agree. This ia a very brutal poem. If you went through this, then I feel empathy towards you. I hope that your life is much better.
Mike
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Thanks, Mike, Yes, I am much happier these days. Good to talk to you again, Thanks for commenting.
Bell,
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Wow! Brutal and brutal! I am in awe.
Straight to the finalist list!
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Thanks, and yes...
The poem was very brutal,
just like my childhood.
Bell, xx
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