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Ponder in the Dark

I know not what I have done
to upset the presence above,

but he persists on hiding my Sun.

 

Disgusted glares from the

clouds with black linings;

even the lightning looks dark to me.

I can no longer see the horizon

to dream of a more distant land,

perhaps I shall never dream again.

 

Say... Is that a bridge?

Author notes

Prompt: Angry Skies

The last line is probably one of the favourite lines I have ever produced. There is a reason. In fact there are several. What words does it speak to you?

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  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Excellent indeed. A very probing piece, one that is so sad and dark. However the bridge shows me that there is a future and light ahead and we must keep searching. Yes a wonderful end to this, quite uplifting.
    Thank you for a great entry
    Gaylene

    • MichaelBe
      September 16, 2008
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      Thanks so much for the kind comment; Im glad you liked my poem Its also nice to see you thought of opportunity and future when you read abouth the bridge, some others did not

  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    I love the uniqueness of thought within this poem
    Disgusted glares from the

    clouds with black linings;

    even the lightning looks dark to me
    those lines say so much..
    as does the bridge..
    Best wishes in the contest
    Julie