Her light, deemed breeze as often named,
whispers soft touch from hushing lips
attuned to powers she's been famed
with subtle sips.
She comes like breath that's gently held
pressed and released within her mold
caressed where paths to heaven meld
in tales foretold.
Her care and candor carry her
as unmistakable as sound
and though at times her whirl's a blur
she would be found;
found dressing leaves with trembled thought
and donning garb in shades of red
with certainty for what is not
an ending dead.
And with her breath of frosted air
she stripes the trees and silks the grass
knowing her touch shows subtle care
as seasons pass.
Author notes
The theme is ... Wind
So what might wind mean to you...
No word limit but a shorter burst of wind is preferred, twenty lines more or less would be a useful rule of thumb.
Any style or form is fine.
Background Courtesy of: A Site 4 Sore Eyes
In a list
A contest entry
- Wind by Peteskid.
1000 points, ended September 15, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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So glad to see a trophy on this one!!
" found dressing leaves with trembled thought
and donning garb in shades of red" sigh..
I love your ability to weave words into a melodic song, no music necessary~
Beautiful~
Kris
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
I am pleased you enjoyed this one as well. It is such an amazing form. Addictive really ... ~Pamela
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Addictive, yes
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Amazing as always, Pam. Your work is always so lovely in style and content, and always enhanced with beautiful artwork. You are truly gifted.
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Always your talent astounds me!!!!! It is always wonderful to read your work
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Jeff
Thank you my friend.
So pleased you enjoyed this one. I love a Sapphic Ode. ~Pamela 
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Such a lovely picture of movement and change--so much going on there with the senses, too. A beautiful form, used skillfully here, and the movement of the rhythm seems perfectly suited to the variableness of the wind. Lovely poetry.
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ten
Thank you so much for your kind words. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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It really is beautiful Pam. A wonderful form you seem to make effortlessThe way you describe your feelings within is heart warmingSplendid imagery and rhyme well done best of wishes to you.
Tony
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Tony
Thank you so much. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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Good grief - a Sapphic Ode! Who writes these nowadays? And an excellent example - I am more than impressed.
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Vozhd
Thank you. ~Pamela
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Sapphic form brings the quality of music, lyrical melody to the words; the short verse brings attention as it diverts the regular beat of the lines. And such rich lines they are; for in Autumn the wind has many meanings, more than colors and swirling air, but also the endings cycles of growth, we see so much of the wind: there is a journey , a mission to make changes, and the beauty of it as it transforms the landscape. And of course the sounds wind mixing with so many features of the season to bring unique sounds too. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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PK
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and the honor of bronze in your contest. I am so very pleased. ~Pamela
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I once thought of this meter as mine, but you and Sue Cardwell have stolen it from me, and done it so beautifully.
Your poem itself matches the form to perfection, it is light in touch yet has deep currents, flowing effortlessly from one end to the other.
A genuine grade A "Not Bad"!
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Thank you. A "Not Bad" RULES!! ~Pamela
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Wonderful Pam
Different form but it does rhyme so well.
I do hate that winter is getting so close.
Seems we were just waiting for the spring thaw.
Jim
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Jim
Thank you so much for your kind words. This is just such an amazing form. I fell love with this form. ~Pamela
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