I waited for you, I loved you,
I needed you.
You were my escape, my safe house.
You knew me inside and out, upside down,
and you always seemed to catch me
when I started s l i p pi n g .
All the things I thought I knew
Walked out the door with you.
And all the things you used to say
got lost somewhere along the way.
But where do we go when hope’s lost?
You said you’d always be there, for each bridge we had to cross.
You stopped catching me, stopped catching us.
You knew it meant the world to me
and you played it off as if it was
nothing.
All the things I thought I knew
Walked out the door with you.
And all the things you used to say
got lost somewhere along the way.
I was stuckonyou, I was r u n by you,
I needed you to survive.
You became a dependency, a 'cheap obsession'.
In you I would confide.
But then you had to g o and make it bad. Your actions, your lies,
they rip me apart inside and out, ups!de d0wn; they tear < |apart my heart| 3.
All the things I thought I knew
Walked out the door with you.
And all the things you used to say
got lost somewhere along the way.
All the things I thought were you
disappeared in to the blue
And all the things
you promised me
are stolen figments,
lost at sea.
I guess this is my Happy Ending,
No more lies,
no more pretending.
I’m on my own, a wide open sea.
Calm and serene,
my heart needs to be.
So thanks for caring, thanks for sparing,
one minute of your day for me.
It’s over now, and now I see
that you never,
ever, [Don’t say forever...]
wanted me.
Author notes
Haha... that was fun.
Umm I separated and spaced certain words on purpose for effect. It just helps to stress certain points in the poem, showing now that the character is falling apart without the person she was so dependent on. Anyways, I hope you enjoy it, even just a little bit!
Please tell me what you think
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I know this well!!!! You leave the reader filled with angst for themselves and for anyone that has had to live this.....Very well done and thank you for your entry
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Wow, this wa s jam packed with e.m.o.t.i.o.n.
(thought i'd use the same effect) hehe lol.
Loved this style of poetry you created
placing emphasis on the spaced words;
very effective in stressing the importance of it.
This was such a heartfelt & powerful write
with so many sentiments from the heart.
Amazing write.. truly this one's my fave! -
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And to think I felt little to nothing while writing it. Heh. =] I guess my contemporary literary class is right: poetry is NOT about expressing one's emotion, or any emotion at all... T.S. Eliot, what a strange little man!
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Thought-provoking...
and a very interesting, heart-and-soul-felt poem. I felt goosebumps while reading of the painfulness of this character's loss of a love. Hopefully not forever! Best of luck in the contest, this is an awesome masterpiece!! Thank you for sharing your creative muse with us!!! Peace, Cyn 
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks! =]
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i really like this, im goin through a touight ime right now...like always
and that sorta helped.
thank you
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You're welcome... take it easy, you'll get through it, whatever it is (if you wanna talk, I'm here) just remember, when you've hit the bottom, the only way to go is back up
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A Beautiful, well-expressed, heartfelt & sincere composition with a tone of sadness.
Creative presentation!
Well Done & best of luck in the contest!
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Aww thank you so much. It means a lot to me!
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