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Darkness

Darkness has finally consumed me

i am  longer who i once was my name and faith reunced

my soul was lost among the loneliness

wandering over the world searching for my essence for my lost self

the darkness can t scare me i welcome it with a great embrace for my heart eclipse by loneliness and turns black

my blood frozen soul-less eyes is another gift i have obtained

for i am just a shell of a man wandering this world longing for the one true person that will help restore my lost and tattered soul to my empty frame

waiting for my guests to arrive

the grim reaper

the bird of prey and the soul of death

for i have become a lost soul in their hands waiting in the darkness

for that one special person to bring my soul and i back together by the love that they offer to me

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  • incondite
    October 24, 2008
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    User name in the author notes please.


    • LucifersAngel
      October 24, 2008
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      sorry i didnt see the aurthor notes to put my name in.. but my screen name is Lucifersangel


  • Nitenovanavium
    October 8, 2008

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    okay, here is where I plan to begin. (sorry if this sounds a little mean)
    please watch out for your spelling and grammar, otherwise you'll end up looking like spelt engrish (no offense)
    and two, don't enforce metaphors, allow them to evolve over time.

    other than those tiny two things this poem was pretty cool, but I don't believe in sugar coating poems for more stars on comments. You have nearly infinate potential to become an amazing poet and writer!
    And I, more than many, many people would love to see that!


  • rose-of-the-dead
    October 8, 2008
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    beautiful...u can feel the raw emotion...


  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    I loved it

    This was amazing grat job


  • eatablewords
    October 6, 2008

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    omg!!..this is deep, its funny how you put ur emotions and feelings into this poem, yet when i talk to you you seem so collected and cool,this is very well written, cant wait to see more from u babe....


  • Love til Deaths end
    October 6, 2008

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    This is quite beautiful.
    And heart felt.
    It makes me tremble, for this want, loneliness, and brokeness I have felt.
    Love it.


  • Vampirette1901
    September 15, 2008
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    SWEET I LOVE IT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that the best in the world...


  • Luciferslilangel
    September 15, 2008

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    i don't know what to say! it takes my breath away! love be be waitting for me as i disappear in the mist of the swamp for i will come one day back to thee.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    welcome to all poetry

    Just a small tip for you but when writing a poem try to add in the use of punctuatuion such as comma's and full stops as these can help to build and mephasize both flow and rhythm to the structure to the poem. also try to capitalize the "i's" when using them as a personal reference. there was some deep and meanigful lines within this piece which really had strong emotion etched within them and really allowed them to express what the poems meaning and purpose was. a deep and effective write that i feel many within the site will be able to connect to. well done and welcome to the site.

    Charlotte
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  • queen Moderators member
    September 11, 2008
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    welcome to all poetry

    Hi LucifersAngel

    You have some great lines in this poem. Lonliness is like a black hole that will consume us if we let it I know there is someone out there for you. Probably looking for you right this minute PLease keep writing, reading and commenting
    Barbara
    site greeter

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