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Moving On

You said your wife had died recently.
But the ashes were still warm.
The urn lay inches away
When I opened my eyes.
I left you a note.

never written poetry before. This is part of a piece of prose I was writing. ... Does it work?

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  • Celticpoet silver member
    September 10, 2008
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    Absolutely!

    No doubt about it...it works for me!...Dan xxx