Tell me why,
When your sat right beside me you feel so far away
I always felt so close to you,
I always felt that I really knew you-
But alone I stand praying you値l find me.
Tell me why,
You let the magic slip away
I thought you were a man I could depend on,
I thought the romance would last forever-
But alone I stand praying you値l find me.
Tell me why,
I have forgotten how to kiss, to really be kissed!
I wish I could tell you my desires
I wish I could feel your skin- everything seems so cold-
Alone I stand praying you値l find me.
Alone I stand praying you値l find me
But the emptiness is starting to remind me
That maybe dreams don稚 come true
Perhaps I知 not the girl for you-
But tell me why!
Author notes
maybe hearts are made to be broken.
Please tell me what you think
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aww thats so sad! such a beautiful poem, such a meaningful write...
you've been acknowledged.
congrats, and thanks for sharing, it was really touching,
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SO TENDER, AND LONGING!!!
I believe all of us have had someone who we felt inside we wanted to know that we care so much about them. Down deep though there is a small voice which is saying they are not the one for us. We still dream though that we could be together with them.
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winner for the week of 8/25Congrats to you from us allYou Have Been Acknowledgedawesome Hun you have done a good jobHugs Angel♥
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wow thank you
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we were hoping this might get more people out in the lime light to see the awesome poets here on AP hugs♥
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sad poem of unrequited love and a broken heart. well written.
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I think when your heart breaks your mind somehow pretends that they'll come back. That they still want you like you want them. It is so hard when they don't. I am going through this right now and your words were so perfect for what I'm feeling. My poem I miss you is so pathetic because I'm begging for her back. Love sucks sometimes huh?
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Love it
It's so sad though. A lot of people make the mistake of waiting to be found, instead of saying, "Here I am!"
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I loved it
keep up the good work
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Thanks
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SO, SO SAD!!!
I see so much of this, one who is trying so hard to keep the love alive between them and the other not caring at all. There is way to much selfishness in this world, the understanding and compassion is gone from relationships.
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thanks you
Its been like a year since I was last on how are you?
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And just maybe that heart is also made to overcome tradgedies and get better. You are pretty much saying that you are missing, forgetting things when you should be saying that you are waiting for said things. Otherwise I really loved this. I got goosebumps while reading it, and I only get that when I come across something good, like your piece. Thanks for the opportunity to read such an amazing piece
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wowzers!! goosebumps? thanks!
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you're most certainly welcome.
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Wow....that was amazing. I was in a relationship once and I felt alone. Needless to say we broke up and my heart at the same time. This write moved me almost to tears, the emotion behind your words is amazing.
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wow thank you so much for your brill comment
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awwww I totally understand I have been there and have had my heart broken many times but I promise it will get better and you will find the one that really loves you and the one you are ment to be with. It just takes awhile. Very beautiful yet sad poem. Keep it coming!!!!
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thanks for your comment,im still in my relationship it was just a hard time when i wrote this
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Yep! I soooooo know what you mean! I know every word, every thought, every feeling that went into this work of art! I think many of us have been there and can relate to this one! Great job!
Thanks for sharing this with us!
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thank you so much for the comment on Why?
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Yup, I'v so been here. one minute your completely inlove and the next everythings changed.
"Alone I stand praying you’ll find me
But the emptiness is starting to remind me
That maybe dreams don’t come true
Perhaps I’m not the girl for you-
But tell me why!"
Its funny how were always left feeling empty in the end. This was a great write hun. sad. it hurts to lose love, but dont close your heart. theres someone out there you dont have to believe it but you will see. just sit back and relax.. let love find you <3
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thank you for your lovely comment thank God i havent lost love though, just having a bumpy time :S
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I think it's a nice piece of work ,that surely transmits emotions but i think you should work a little bit more on it."Tell me why " is repeated in the first three stanza ,but it doesn't give much emotion ,though what you write is supposed to make us cry,transmit much more feeling.Anyway it was nice and that's just my opinion.Keep it up !
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thank you for the comment,however i was not trying to make you emotional or cry. the feeling of this poem is numb, cold, lost. thank you so much for the comment
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