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The Hospice Pass

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The Hospice Pass

Can greatness breed in stature short;

upon white steed when guns report?

What is the need for such consort;

is there a creed within some court?

 

Can greatness breed in stature short

that men would bleed in his support?

Who would believe that such a man

contrived this sheave in master plan?

 

Can greatness breed in stature short,

that soldiers heed this wee escort?

What’s my opinion of short limbs;

when minions follow singing hymns?

 

Can greatness breed in stature short;

is there a creed within some court?

 

 

 

Author notes

Oil Painting Title: Bonaparte Crossing the St. Bernard by Jacques Louis David


Modified Kyrielle Sonnet:

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  • Lyndon gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Certainly, as a leader Napoleon was short in stat ure

    ~ that is, compared with his Imperial Guard. However, at about 66 inches,he was above average height for a Frenchman in his day! Not that this really matters as the myth is greater than the man!
    I admire the way that you rhetorically promulgate your theme by way of rhetorical questions. It is not only engaging but a significant use of repeated questions in this short piece. In your way, you are as effective as Blake in his "Tyger! Tyger! " poem although Blake's poem is forever famous.
    The Kyrielle has been masterfully modified. I do notr know about others, but I truly admire this poetic offering.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Well.. my shorter friends consider themselves "fun sized" lol.. so I guess it can!!

    I think Napoleon would like to think so also!

    Fab poem!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Can greatness breed in stature short;

    Yes! Yes it can! I'm only 4'10". hehehe. Just kidding. Amera, your work only amazes me and takes my breath away. Your flow is always right on target and reads like a gentle brook.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    I wonder if Napoleon was really the wee squit history likes to make out - a lot of it is to do with that famous Gillray cartoon of him and Pitt carving up the world. His nickname - Le Petit Caporal - was given to him by his troops after four successive victories...

    (Marie, stop blethering - you're only showing off!)

    OK - I utterly ADORE that David painting. Always have!

    The poem - it's very, very clever. Very, very bunniful.


  • Tirrell
    September 10, 2008

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    It reads very lovely, I enjoyed it much!
    I love the imagery of the lines, and found it quite pleasing to the eye. Wonderfully composed.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Great poetesses are not confined to the conventional forms but can forge there own when need arises, repeating the first rather than the fourth line of each stanza gives this a very different feel to the classical Kyrielle sonnet.
    The internal rhyme is enticing and the whole piece is a lively and thoughtful poem

    I cannot possibly deny you a "Not Bad"


  • PerVirtuous
    September 10, 2008

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    Good things can come, the saying says,
    In itty-bitty packages.
    This poem’s short yet shows us all,
    With force of screaming cannonball,
    That small things can indeed be great,
    So, Waterloo is not your fate.
    My expectation is you’ll hold
    The first-place trophy dipped in gold.
    The poem’s flow is quite divine,
    The rhyme and meter very fine.
    The image small but powerful
    I rate the whole thing wonderful.
    So as I say goodbye to thee
    I leave you with these bunnies three!

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