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~ Breathe~



Breathing comes in shallow breath
reclining into soft moans of sorrow.
Emerging in soft tears like feathered wings,
attitude becomes solitude, and remembering
that we all need time to exhale becomes the
happy ending.
Emerging from the catastrophic's of life.




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Truth within an Acrostic.

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 19, 2008

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    Glad to see a trophy on this gem. I so love what can be done with acrostic. unique, different and flows like silk. Beautiful my friend. The blossom every opening. ~Pamela


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    This is beautiful, such a soft and sorrowful poem with a great ending. I am in awe of people who can do such wonderful form. So hat's off to you here. Best to you in the contest


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 1, 2008

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    excellent

    A great job with this Acrostic...
    I had a poem called Breathe..had I known this contest was going on would of entered it LOL
    But my luck no pre write
    Congrats on the honorable mention as well
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • daviscth silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    You did a beautiful job with this acrostic! The imagery is awesome and I enjoyed every breath of it.


  • poetryality silver member
    September 19, 2008

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    I love acrostic poetry. Your work makes me know why. A very involved piece of writing here poet.

    "we all need time to exhale becomes the
    happy ending"


    I am left to much to ponder.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee

  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    Such truth in these words, sometimes we need to see past the bad to see the good in everything. Easier said than done. Excellent take on this prompt. Best to you in the contest


  • MuddyKing
    September 10, 2008

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    attitude becomes solitude
    love that passage
    saying so much if we take time to listen now and then
    I would never have know this was an acrostic if you hadn't said in your notes...so smooth and easy
    like the music of John Mayer
    love it
    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • Errant Panther gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    I got so wrapped up in the passionate and soft thoughts that it wasn't until after seeing your author note that I realised it was an acrostic. Great job my friend and best wishes for the contest.


  • Samplette gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    A wonderfully crafted acrostic. Great message within as well. Best to you in the contest. I enjoyed it very much.
    Sam


  • unavailable
    September 10, 2008

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    This is a good poem, works nicely with the picture.


  • poet2angels gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Truth indeed....

    I love Acrostics especially when done beautifully like this one and even more so when soft and filled with nothing but pure emotion, so this one I adore.....

    Lynda

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