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a breath of fresh air

there is a gossamer web on my window frame
I stare at it and wonder how long has it been there
long enough for its weaver to have moved on to newer corners
leaving behind this tell tale sign of what once was
how sad that two can share a house and yet live seperately
on the window sill is a small wet circle
a tear from my still damp eye
shed for one who left without saying goodbye
the spider will have started afresh
a new begining in the same house
time for me to do the same
throwing open the window
I inhale deeply and smile



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  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 23
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    Lovelty write here

    Yes to startr a new and find happiness once again is a choice we each make in time


  • couldbeworse
    January 21

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    Im getting a sad, lonely home from this but still room for a positive outcome. excellent write...you really conveyed your emotions well.


    • honey bear
      January 21
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      thank you for reading my friend, this is an imaginitive write as i am one of the lucky people who have a very happy home but an overactive imagination
      i am glad you got the right feel from this read.


  • Melodies
    October 25, 2008

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    Honey Bear... guess what? I LOVE THIS POEM!

    Aye, I do, that. Love this poem so much, I am carrying it away to Poetry Planet, where it will be enjoyed by hundreds of visitors. Thank you VERY much for sharing your talent, beautiful lady.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    October 25, 2008

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    This is well-expressed and positive.
    A nice comparison drawn with the spider's new beginning.




  • tomisb
    September 11, 2008

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    From dust to dust, ashes to ashes. Better be good for the comost heap. I like your symbols and how they transmute and are reborn. Very nicely catching an array of feelings you serve a full cup of anguish without being overwrought and catch the sunrise without being trite.

    Love, Tom B


  • unavailable
    September 10, 2008

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    'how sad that two can share a house and yet live seperately'

    this is a sad line, I know how this is through watching my sister and her ex husband in their last few years of marriage.

    I love the cheery ending to the poem, such a nice way to help readers to think with a positive attitude.



  • poet2angels gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Very unique!
    I love the imagery of the window flinging open and fresh breeze filling your senses....
    lovely...

    Lynda

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