Hunting seasons arrived
evil blisters through,
hunger drawing near
dissection's over due.
Rabid steps are run
fear drenches eyes,
Reaper's scythe is swung
begging your demise
Death's unholy stench
breathes down your back,
unsealing all screams
before silent shadows,
attack...
Author notes
Picture is the Prompt: 40 words, exact.
Credit artist
http://dholl.deviantart.com/art/The-Dread-Domain-96173276
A contest entry
- Quickie Dark Prompt. by Sweet Impatience.
750 points, ended September 18, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Cool... Short, dark & sweet...
And a great prompt to draw from...
As always, a compelling narrative that enthralled throughout...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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the imagery through out this poem is outstanding. you did an outstanding job with not only the prompt but also your poem.. Wow I love the darkness that just seeps with each word that you've written.
good luck in the contest
kat
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Magnificent!!! You never fail to deliver the dark and morbid with perfection!!! Thank you for your entry
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Okay, dammit- you have to send someone to sleep with me tonight. Or leave the hall light on. Great scary stuff, I'll bill you for the therapy...
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--squeals happily--
Your magnificence is spawning a pure ecstatic bubble in my chest, though I'm unsure as of why... your talent makes my heart sing... you wonderful, magnficent poet... who seems to be going on a dark streak
WOW!!!!
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cant read you to often my lady..otherwise i cant sleep at night. horror is your forte well done.
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Perfect in darkness for the pictures...so very eerie and full of emotions of fear and greatly imagery...flows along well to the end...
well done...best to you!
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Clever! "Fear drenches eyes" I love that.
Much luck to you, though not needed!
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wow a brilliant take on the promt very dark and eriee good luck in the contest
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Oh wow this is dark and creepy! Wonderful wording. Think you might have this in the bag
Great flow and rhyme scheme too!
All the best to yolu
Gaylene
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ooh yay this is so dark and lovely. your wording is great. and though it isn't as good as some as your other writes I loved it all my love love you twinny
kitty xxx -
Arrgh... I'm scared of the Reaper
You're on a dark and devilish run hunny and I LOVE it!! hehehe...
Awesome piece
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Run little one run, you know this is golden my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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'over due'==>overdue, uno word
Other than that, the deux possessive forms you use are correct. Awesomesauce!
"begging your demise" Damn, that is just...suicidal-sounding.
"unsealing all screams"
Is there a possibility that you could edit this to be something like:
"unsealed screams/before silent shadows"
I think the -ing in 'unsealing' & the 'all' are unnecessary syllables.
Good luck
Jessica
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Perfect take on the prompt
A chilling write to be sure. "Evil blisters through" this is a fabulous line and only one of many luck is something you will not need here, But I will wish it anyway. Great write, Boog
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This fits the pic to a T..left chilling images in my mind.
Good luck
~sugar~
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Chilling words to go with that picture! Great images, depth and emotion.
best wishes in your contest.
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