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I bleed... ( Gold )

Darkness of thoughts never fades

blending in shadows,

haunting beauty in path of true love,

ever tripping over raised roots,

veins of nature bleed.

 

I look at you...

 

You are my world,

my future,

my past.

 

Hurt

 

Painful words etched in spilled ink,

blotting paper absorbs a little,

cutting it slices,

I bleed.

 

remembering times,

of smiles and the laughter,

we shared,

still do,

but...

only for a while,

felt like it would be forever.

 

Tears hidden from view,

bottled emotions

captured in glass,

only to shatter once more.

 

Sit with me,

talk...

 

Tell me how we can move on,

from the endless hell,

we have created for ourselves.

 

Touch me,

feel my warmth,

the way you used to..

as we lay together

wrapped in arms,

closer.

 

For inside me,

a light shines for you,

its deep within,

it beats, missing then beats again,

for this my love

I bleed.


 

 

Author notes

"True love does not fade so easily but lingers deep within the cortex of the soul, rearing its head with memories that are best forgotten at times"

By: Yours truly!!!
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  • Heroesrox
    September 6

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    Julie, this is wonderfull! I totally agree with Shakespure when I say that you DO have an admirable way with your words and how they flow. Bravo, my dear friend. Best wishes to you.

    Thanks for the share!

    ♠ Heroesrox ♠


  • Shakespure
    March 15
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    You have a skill with words tha i admire


  • Super-man
    October 16, 2008
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    FABULOUS

    Lingers and gnores at it.

    Beautiful writing


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 24, 2008
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    This is truly powerful and very touching!! Amazing job!! I love it!!


  • trekkergirl
    September 20, 2008

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    This definitely deserves the gold. It is excellent. I love the way you write. It is excellent. You write wonderfully with imagery.


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    September 15, 2008

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    beautifully written, and so true of heartbreak, aching and parting. Well deserving of Gold


  • jcat gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    How you did this I will never know....but you captured what was in my mind, heart and soul!! This is exactly how I feel and will always feel no matter what he could do....Everything that I have been wanting to express you did and you did it in the most incredible way......Thank you!


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      September 15, 2008
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      I am so touched that you loved the sadness of mind in this poem.
      The quote spoke to me, in a subtle voice, like I was indeed reading a mind.. yours or mine.
      Thank you for the honor of taking Gold
      Love Julie xx


  • Abe 1
    September 15, 2008

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    really luv dis one hunny
    til beautifully written
    read the an and wow fitting
    ope it does great for you its deserved
    abe


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    September 11, 2008
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    A beautiful, although Sad piece---So true these days!
    Well Done!


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    Fantastic!!!

    Enthralling!!!
    Was so totally engrossed in your words...
    Such imagery & carefully layered emotion that was incredibly compelling to read...
    Well done!!!


  • Mat Larkin
    September 10, 2008

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    captivating write...

    sad, dark, sweet, yearning... yet sounding in hope and love...and I am not comfortable commenting on free-verse. It does strike quite a chord with me, though...thanks. Mat


  • maralisa silver member
    September 10, 2008

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    wow a fantastic take on the promt julie full of raw vivid emotion from stanza one through to the last stanza I can truely relate to your poem in many ways good luck in the contest my friend marina


  • onesugar gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    A wonderful heartfelt write hon...I am just experiencing my first ever true love...been in love before...but never like this...so if this was to end for whatever reason...I know I would never get over it..what you have put here would be my feelings to a T.

    This is very emotional and sad, that pulls on the heart strings.

    Good Luck in the contest with this hon
    ~sugar~


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Oh wowzy hun! This is stunning, you really were on a roll here! Beautiful honest emotions, superbly penned. Good luck

  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    September 10, 2008

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    Beautiful take on the prompt--Sincere and well versed and yet heartbreaking in its expression.
    Well done & Best of luck in the contest!


  • daviscth silver member
    September 10, 2008

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    Julie, your words are so true for many of us. The imagery in this is so real......
    Good luck in the contest sis.


  • Topaze gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Such a lovely write dear poet, the emotions stir the coldest soul. My best wishes always.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Wow.. just wow. This was so powerful and filled with emotions just pouring from your heart here.
    Your words speak volumes.
    Such true sentiments penned here.

    Loved it!
    Best of luck hun, in the contest


  • Angelflower
    September 10, 2008

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    oh bravo!! you did such a wonderful job with this!! I really love it! the flow was wonderful and the imagery!! it was just so loving!! you really put a lot of emotion into this write!! Best of luck in the contest!!

    Angel

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