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Tracks And Tunes

My tunes
and
the moon
with many tracks
will lead my lifes
roads
Follow the turns
hold on tight
take all slow
singing a song
will get you
there sooner...

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  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    September 12, 2008
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    yep sing along.. make the journey more rich.good luck


  • Cynthia Gaines
    September 10, 2008
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    Good work...

    Good luck in the contest!!! -Cyn


  • Barbara gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Nicely done. Short, and to the point, yet very eloquant in its wording. I stumbled a bit over the lines "will lead my lifes / roads". Might have been the 's' on the end, or the lifes/life's, or the natural pause that comes at the end of the line. Not quite sure...or a combination of all three.

    I like the closing, since singing that song makes things go by smoother at times.

    Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest