Tribulation entered her world through the keyhole
Shivering and cold, frightened but bold
She allowed death to enclose her world
A beautiful princess with golden curls
Unwashed soul on a whirl, kept and made to kneel
for killer deals, bent over and violated till
she squealed, and payment was humbly made
Dirty sex was the trade, twenty grams taken and
paid in sweat and blood, bleeding there on a dirty floor
Dripping wet she reached for the used needles to
ruffle her horny bud, banging a gram in one go
Now lying on the floor in hammer throes
Caught between life and death, and gasping for
every precious breath, clasping her soul she went
into meltdown
Saliva frothing profound, rivers of gore seeping
through every orifice, childless girl defenceless
from such impulsiveness
Violent convulsions so contort and twist her body
into deaths curl, in time her blood congeals
Young and dead at sixteen, stripped naked and cleaned
She was in her keepers eye still pristine
A beautiful princess to keep and violate for
sick thrills
Never free, never able to flee
Deaths calling finally gave her the peace she desired
And so there it took her into hells fires
Just another overdose to transpire
Author notes
Inspired by a real life overdose, any overdose that results in death is always sad and one too many.
In a list
A contest entry
- Leave out all of the Rest by MYsecondchance.
375 points, ended October 18, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Any thoughts I'll much appreciate
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The first poem I wrote on here when I joined was called: A silver little packet' i've not had many reads on but the ones I did get were very honest. I dare say people have been honest with you so i'm not going to say stuff and make you feel bad.
Any write about yourself and things that have occured in your life deserve the up most respect because they are real, not the brain working. This is elagant and surreal and i'll say no more incase I offend.
Best of luck
dryad Enya -
any overdose that results in death is always sad and one too many.
It is a fact that most overdose's are "accidental"
the truth though is it is always mental
Those that control will always have the upper hand
until we on the outside decide to take a stand.
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Good poem, it's sad that an overdose finally makes them stop...death is what makes them stop harming them and the people around them. Good poem.
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Awesome
i just started reading and it captured me with many images flashing through my head so I'm assuming that means you did a very awesome job.
peace -
what a write. the imagery you penned was grotesque, yet your words were amazing. well done. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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i liked this very much. there was a grim story too it and i thought that was awsome. this is really very good. the reason i even clicked on this peice is because my father died of an overdose about 2 years ago. while it wasnt the same thing, i liked this peice just the same. im sure for someone it happened that way. i apprecate this write. i think your very talanted!=)
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Wow this is an amazing piece!! I really liked it!!
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Easy to appreciate
This is powerful. How often do people think about an untimely end when reaching for a high? Something that started out feeing so good? I loved the images, as grisly as they were, for the realism. I must admit that he first time she was refered to as a princess caught me off guard, but it made sense later when she was violated. She looked like a princess to whoever she was with - a drug addict's princess. You did a great job of evoking emotion, not simply revealing a sad story. It's the kind of poem that makes you feel as though you've lost something. Then afterwards, it's almost as though you've gained some wisdom, just from reading about one girl's tragic end. Well done.
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Thank you for your entry but I have to say that you seem to have misread the rules of my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets" competition. For I can find no allusion in it to either poetry or poets. I wish you success with it elsewhere - but for this competition it really is a non-starter.
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excellent poem...very well written and great imagery...nicely done
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Bloody hell I'm blown away by this piece so full of raw emotion and in depth with some deep imagery. I liked it reading your poem made me cry.
Thanks for sharing such a talented piece and take care
*hugs*
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So, so sad and tragic. Wonderfully written. Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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this poem is awesome def. better then your other (just being honest)
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i love this piece of writing so vivid and descriptive thanx very much for entering
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This is soooooo very sad. A young life so wasted. This really does hit home how some people sometimes use themselves so poorly. Poor self esteem and all.
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wow this is AWSOME my dear truelly I can relate to this as an addict my self i hope for you to find sobrietty and to find peace.....great write thanks for entering
xoxox
Tasha -
Wow...
I have nothing else to say to describe the way that made me feel. Other then a little short of breath, and perhaps a little queazy.
It was powerful, the imagery was amazing and all the while I could see this girl taking her last fix and thrashing in the throes between life and death on a dirty floor...
This was brilliant. Really.
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