Beneath a bare umbrella
my colors melt and run
from dark sunlight which turns to rain;
thunder rumbles, crashes
as lightening strikes the ground.
My thoughts are lost in moments
of God's sadness as Angels clash in anger.
Enlightenment befalls me that we are not
the only children he has who turn and let him down.
Author notes
ANGRY SKIES
A contest entry
- PIF/Prompt by AliceinPoetryLand.
700 points, ended September 17, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You did such a wonderful job writing for this prompt. Your talent just glows in this my friend. Congrats on winning the bronze.
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Oh this is a very sad and melancholy write, wonderfully expressed.A very thought provoking piece. Thanks so much for your entry
Gaylene
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Beautiful!
A mystical beauty and wonder of a poem! Perfect rhythm and deep meaning! This poem is not only charming -- it has deep impact and deeply felt emotion! It conveys a mysterious feeling on the reader in a familiar yet, distant way. Great work! Good luck in the contest!
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This is so very poignant. What a wonderful interpretation of the prompt. I agree with the lady below, it made me think a lot. Best to you in the contest
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Wow sis.. this has such depth!! Really made me stop and think!
Fantastic penning for that prompt!
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very very deep in ten lines, the message is profound
Angry indeed are the skies that look down.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Blessings.
Frozentearz
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wow... it makes me so sad to think how i let Him down all the time.... and my parents, too. this was really beautiful.
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Such a wonderful and creative
piece that you have penned here.
I hope that you do well with this
one. I love the imagery in it!
Good luck to you my friend!
Jeremy0826
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Beautiful poem and right on the prompt.
Best of luck in the contest.
Don
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wonderful
Such a very creative take on the prompt. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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