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Wanted:

My ideal husband would be someone

who could love me as much as I love them
he wouldn’t have to be handsome

though that would only be a plus
I want him to more than just barely breathing
for I want to enjoy his love

tall or short does not matter nor does skinny or fat
he’d talk to me like I’m a person
not the old lady or the cat
he’d ask my option and actually listen to what I say
even if he didn’t understand my silly little ways
he still put his arms around me at the end of the day
even if he thinks I a little crazy

as I bounce from chore to chore
he’d smile and know ony it is him that I adore
he’d have to like kissing I don’t want to live without that
when I think of him I’ll smile cause he’s faithful, true and loyal
when he’s down it’s me he’ll turn to

when he’s sick I’ll be his nurse
when he needs to cry I’m his shoulder
when he’s happy I am his joy
oh he can get without me as sometimes he might have too
but he’ll still miss me because he loves me

and he’ll let me know it
and he’ll do the same things for me
he’ll be stern and firm yet sweet gentle and kind

 

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  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    The first two lines explains what we all want... to be loved as we are...not as someone we're not...
    A good poem espressing your desired traits of a lover.


  • Frodofan silver member
    September 10, 2008
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    Really would be better with punctuation instead of all just smooshed together like this. You also even seem to missing a word here and there. The rhyme of "cat" was very forced. A little weird actually, I wasn't expecting it to rhyme at all because the first several lines didn't.

    Nice wishes though. Thanks for entering.


    • wildfiredreamer
      September 10, 2008
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      it sucks
      lol
      I am going to have to change this one alot
      I grabbed a few mins before school started and typed then posted it when I got home, and never got back to it, what a mistake.
      normally I write something, leave it a while and then come back and rework it, to catch things.
      the few rhymes just happened, wasn't going for that at all.
      I did love the idea of your contest though