I can’t believe we’ve finally met
It’s like we’re meant to be together
Undying love that hearts possess
I’ll love you always and forever
I’ve waited all of my life for you
I’ve spent so many years alone
Dreaming of a love to fall into
A special girl to call my own
We only met just yesterday
But I feel as though I’m falling
In love with loving you this way
I’m waiting here for you to call me
I lied alone in bed last night
I couldn’t get you off of my mind
There’s something there that feels so right
A love like this is hard to find
I’ve failed at love a time or two
I thought that life and love were hopeless
My heart awoke when I met you
That’s why I cried the night I wrote this
I couldn’t wait there anymore
I picked up the phone and began to dial
I’d felt these butterflies before
But they hadn’t been there in a while
The phone was ringing on your end
It was hard to breathe; my voice was shaking
I needed to hear your voice again
I felt my lonely heart un-breaking
I heard someone pick up the phone
I wait and listen for a reply
I asked, “ Is anybody home?”
I heard someone begin to cry
I heard a woman on the phone
She didn’t have too much to say
She said, she needed to be alone
To call again another day
She said her daughter had gone out that night
And never made it home
She had just begun to turn out the lights
When she heard the downstairs phone
She had spent half the night up waiting
There was a policeman on the line
He said your daughter’s life is fading
And she doesn’t have much time
I asked the woman what had happened
And if her daughter was all right
I asked with whom; and where she had been
I’d seen her just the other night
She said her daughter called and had met a guy
And she’d found out where he lived
She thought it’d be alright if she stopped by
To give the guy a goodnight kiss
She and her friends were on the highway
When their car went off the road
Another car drove down a one-way
And crashed into them, nose-to-nose
She said her daughter made it through the crash
Her friends were killed on site
Her daughter cried to her with one last gasp
The boy’s name that she’d met that night
Her daughter said that he’d be calling
Because he promised that he would
She fought the tears back that were falling
And said she’d be there if she could
But god had come to take her soul
She’ll dance with angels in the sky
She’s going someplace where you don’t grow old
A place where no one ever cries
She said her memory will see him through
She’ll see him when the time comes
I can’t believe I’ve finally met you
You could’ve been that certain someone
Author notes
This was inspired by something that happened to a friend of mine, Ashley... She met a guy the other night that she really really liked, and thought he could've been the one. She got called into work the next night, and he went off to do his own thing since she couldn't go out with him, she found out the next day that he died that night in a car wreck... I wrote this from my own point of view, that's why it's a girl who dies in the end rather than a guy, but it relays the same message either way... If you ever read this Ashley, the same thing has happened to me before, and I hope you can get over the shock of something so tragic, your friend... Crackertl82
Written January 20th, 2004
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by LostParamour.
500 points, ended September 16, 2004, 61 entries
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Oh god bless that poor girl.
And you, my dear, have one hell of a talent of portraying things your own way.
::Stands and claps::
I love your work
*Eva* -
I love this. It made me cry! I lvoe poems that tell a sotry like this. they get you so into it. This is beautiful. I loved reading it. and I dont know waht else to say that can describe how awesome this is~
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What a touching piece, i send my condolesences to your friend Ashley, some say that love lost is better then no love at all, and i say to those, Try it, and you'll see what the pain is like. I feel sorry for anybody who has to go through this.
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Fantastic write!!! Gave me goosebumps
Keep up the good writting!
Katie -
This is a beautiful poem, but such a sad circumstance. i'm sorry for your friend's loss. if it counts for anything you have the prayers of a stranger on this site. i have never read anything so heartwrenching in my life. it's such a sad piece but so incredibly written. i hope that i can write something as amazing as this someday. thank you for sharing this piece, even though the story is, i'm sure, painful for you and your friend. please don't stop writing, i love your work!
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This is a great poem abeit a sad story. You did a wonderful job telling it. It flows rather nicely. I read the author's comment about Ashley and I too hope she will recover from this tragedy. It is so sad. Thanks for sharing and God Bless
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Bertie -
It reads alot like a poem I wrote called "Death on The Highway" and "By Your Graveside". I wrote them for my wife who was killed a year ago in an auto accident. I really liked the detail you put into this. I'll now have to read more of your work.
I might suggest though working on the ending a bit more.
Your friend and fellow poet
Dennis -
Wow, this is so uplifting and still so sad and probably happens
every day somewhere...
a beautiful story you tell of love and how it ended too abruptly
but it awakens us all to know that every day is special and to love all those around us no matter how small...
Tamara -
Powerful Poetry!
wow! I was really into reading this poem! intense and had my attention! what a awful thing to happen to someone just when they think they may have met the "right" one, how tragic!! -
Oh, my! Well, this rather reminds me of an old song of the 60's, called "Last Kiss", and the music for this poem would be " Last Date" by Floyd Kramer. Lots of "finalities" in this song/lyric.
I didn't look at the category first, and KNEW it would make a good song.
Only thing I would suggest is that, for the sake of it's poetic visual, you break up the body of it in about 4 parts, for though they relate to one and another, the subject change is different every 4 verses or so.
That's the ONly thing....You've done a good one here!!! Thank you for sharing this tingling write! -
I knew people would love this, I loved it. You did an excellent job. I noticed you did do some editing and it came out great. Only something as beautiful as this could come from you.
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wow im impressed this is a great poem keep up the good work
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wow this was such a great piece. filled with lots of heart and emotion. and the story after the poem was like whoa i was like what a sad story. well awesome job!
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That was an incredible thingto read. I don't know what else to say......
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hi,
i have already applauded you fine piece,
i actually read it for a second time,
it sent a chill down my spine.
i think the peice is a beautiful bit of poetry.
and must have been written by a wonderful poet
i just want to say that you really have a gift to get a drift to some one
and i must admit that i breathless after i read it
all you need to know is you are a telented writer.
and im sure you can inspire many people as you have me.
faith121 -
OMG that little story you left after the poem was kinda freaky! I'm left in complete shock!
As for the poem its a wonderful piece - lovely flow!
The story is so well told in poem form in my opinion
Take care
Hayley x xx -
I just read your authors page and figured out why it was so song like!! Seems like the music came through with the words!! Great job!!
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Wow!! I can't imagine!! As far as the poem goes it's absolutely beautiful!! It flows so well...almost song like! Great write!! I want to write so much more...but my words have left me tonight!! I can't wait to read more!
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