who knows when the weight will be lifted?
who knows when the sun will shine?
Who knows when I’d stop mumbling out questions in poetic verse and pretty words?
Who knows when you’d love me?
I’ve built up a brick wall
five years back
when I first met you.
I knew you were different
you knew I was the same.
You thought gifts wrapped in silver packaging
would cause me to swoon all over your smile,
but you were wrong, if I can’t get inside
how do I know you’re really here for love?
it’s a game between the voice of reason
and my ill-fated heart.
we were a type of star-crossed lovers;
where I follow you, unreciprocated
so in the end Romeo lives
and Juliet disappears into her stone-cold grave.
you were full of games
but all I wanted was seriousness to match,
so now when I sit in the hospital room
clammy, with my pulse fading
and skin as pale as snow
you would be beside me,
not joking around with the nurse-in-training.
but what can I do?
it’s a game of wisdom,
and we’re both lacking this time.
Author notes
Monday: [x]Tug-Of-War With My Vocal Chords
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A contest entry
- [♥]Poetry Challenge[♥] by innocence jaded.xx.
3500 points, ended October 28, 2008, 61 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent use of emotion and a terrific way to end this
a wonderful poem
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love the last three lines!
you're gonna win this contest.
hands down
love youuu. -
-you were full of games
but all I wanted was seriousness to match,
so now when I sit in the hospital room
clammy, with my pulse fading
and skin as pale as snow
you would be beside me,
not joking around with the nurse-in-training.
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Ohkay, so when I read these lines, I was just absolutely blow awayyy. I love the first two lines, about how you're saying "yeah, I know you like your games, but I just need you to be serious with me" type of thing. Maybe I'm completely off haha but that's how I read it. And I love the whole hospital thing too. AMAZINGGG.
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this poem was powerful as hell, and I loved the deepness to it, too.
Thanks for entering, love, & best of luck to you ! Keep it up ♥
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