Perdido en el abismo de sus palabras
no hay el principio
me consumiendo enteramente
como el triángulo de las Bermudas consume un buque rebelde
Un lírico que juega y para volver a poner a un golpe,
que reconozco sólo como los corazones
Apresurar en mis memorias de usted,
me tirando más profundo en una novela del misterio
eso es irresoluble
Un terremoto imparable, o la onda de Golpear de emoción duro,
profundo y demorar en el corazón
Usted es un vacío, no llenado, no tocado y presenta para siempre
En el corazón, mi alma y en mi vida
Yo me siento su ausencia en cada esencia de mi es
Usted es la parte del corazón,
Eso ni un Marinero de la Marina podrían encontrar que
Usted es mi Saudade
Author notes
Saudade: "The bitter feeling is the one that hurts inside, a knot in the heart that makes us cry. Worse than solitude, where the hope to find or to re-encounter someone is possible. With saudade, the void inside can't be filled."
Lost in the abyss of your words,
there is no beginning
consuming me entirely,
like the Bermuda triangle consumes a wayward ship
A lyric playing and replaying to a beat,
that I recognize only as my hearts
Quickening at my memories of you,
pulling me deeper into a mystery novel
that is unsolvable
An unstoppable earthquake, or wave of emotion
Striking hard, deep and lingering in my heart
You are a void, unfilled, untouched and forever present
In my heart, my soul and in my life
I feel your absence in every essence of my being
You are the part of my heart,
That not even a Navy Sailor could find
You are my Saudade
In a list
A contest entry
- Saudade by Mari Goes.
1800 points, ended September 20, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be Gentle.
Comments
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wow... thats so amazing. of course, it made it even cooler that you wrote it in Spanish! great. i especially like You are a void, unfilled, untouched and forever present and I feel your absence in every essence of my being. i like how you used the word saudade, that was really neat.
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Beautifully done! I appreciated both the spanish and english version....so...emotional, intense.
Incredible.
Smile♫
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Una sensación del vacío que usted ha descrito tan bien aquí. Mismo toda el agua del océano no podría llenar el vacío que es creado por la ausencia de alguien que amamos. Esta es una manera triste pero muy bela de escribir sobre saudade.
Gracias por esta delicada poesia
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Ah. Gracias.
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You draw the reader in immediately,
"Lost in the abyss of your words,
there is no beginning"
And presumably no end, being an abyss. The line is both intriguing and yet, easily understood.
"that I recognize only as my hearts
Quickening"
Which intensifies the mood. BTW, should that be "heart's?" I'm lousy at punctuation.
"You are a void, unfilled, untouched and forever present"
I like that, At first it seems contradictory but essentially that is what some memories are...without form yet ever present.
Saudade is a interesting word isn't it. As you showed in your poem, it's a multifaceted word that can't be defined by a single definition and it is the skill of all you poets to bring it to life for us readers.
I wish you good luck in the contest, the host is a good judge of poetry. I think she'll like yours.
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I love Spanish! I took it for three years in school and still only speak the very basics. LOL I did try to read through the Spanish version of the poem.
Thanks for the Author's Notes.
Beautiful!
Always ♥
Renee
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Excellento
You make me proud my lil mexican you!
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Wonderful imagery here...PK
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Just Curious.. did you read the spanish version or the english?
Criss
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I liked "marinero de la marina" ...PK
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