Intense first meeting,
where your tiny hands
wrenched my strangled frame,
from mother's womb.
As you left for home,
your words echoed
in my mother's ears,
promising to be
my future groom.
Seasons came and went
many times,
until fate stepped in
drawing you back to my door,
as my engagement party looms.
In reading to my blind sister
you show me dedication
that I've rarely seen,
opening up her world
to trust life again
and to find love in bloom.
Now after many trials,
patience and devotion tested,
games lost and won,
I awaken to your charms.
The subtle yet lingering sigh
plays upon my heart,
just like music from another room.
Author notes
Inspired by the Movie "Music From Another Room" that stars Jude Law, Gretchen Mol, Jeremy Piven, Jennifer Tilly and Brenda Blethyn. Hope you enjoy my poetic summary of this film.
This link gives some details about the film http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Music_from_Another_Room_(film)
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A contest entry
- Pick A Flick by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended September 15, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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You deserved your honourable mention trophy well and truly. I love the journey here of the emotions. Very well written all the way through
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thank you and welcome to AP, anytime you would like me to review something of yours just send me the link. by the way there is a column on here for the emoticons you can use, you should be able to find it via the help tab on top of the page, I will tell you that to make this
you type * hug * without any spaces
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We are tied to events and set free by love. You capture the dance of human topography nicely and with and almost wimsical air, which makes everything displayed that much more poignant.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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thanks so much for your comment, to receive such commendation from you is truly heartening. I appreciate every word of it. Glad you stopped by and I look forward to catching up on some of your work also.
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Awesome job! I really felt the emotion behind this piece! An A+ job! Keep up the awesome work adn thanks so much for the share! I really am looking forward to reading more of your work....which I probably have already............ I read a lot of stuff on here and try to comment on everyones....Sorry for my mindless ramblings.............HAHA!!!!!
Again.....Thanks so much for the brilliant write and share! Good luck with future writes....but judging from this, you don't really need much luck!!!!!
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Beautiful!!! I think you did an amazing job!!! You have much talent and it shows!! Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading this!!! Keep Writing!!! I look forward to reading more from you!!! Also I love the background!!! Absolutely beautiful, and goes very well with the wonderful poem!!! Great Job!!!!
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Wonderful, wonderful poetic encapsulation of a great movie. What beautiful inspiration you have drawn from. Best of luck to you in the contest. I appreciate your taking the time and making the effort to enter. I hope it proved to be an enjoyable experience and challenge for you.
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The ending was so beautiful.. I've never seen the movie but if it inspired you to write something this lovely I would think it's a great movie.. I really loved this write.. It's in my top ten for you..
Best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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Wonderful Poem
Well my friend you have captured what this movie is all about so poetically. An amazing poem to read this morning. The reader can get lost in its imagery. Sounds like it deserves a Gold to me. Take care.
Sandy
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This poem is beautiful but I am a little lost to the meaning, who is the person that drew you from your mothers womb? it seems you are at first talking about your father and than maybe someone else?
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the meaning is revealed in the movie of the same name as this poem, the character that pulled the baby girl from the womb was a five year old boy. This link will help you make sense of it http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Music_from_Another_Room_(film) .
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I have said it before, and I say it again, you are brilliant...
I am so proud of my Cuz
Lynda
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Thanks cuz, glad you loved this piece, did I make you wanna see the film? It's one of my favourites.
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