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cliff diving.

when I fall asleep
my wings fail to keep me safe
and I fall quickly.

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haiku
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  • letters to no one
    January 9
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    I know this feeling, but sometimes falling quickly is good.

    Shelly
    xxx


  • aanika
    September 15, 2008

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    I think it would flow better with a comma at the end of the first line
    but this is wonderful
    I suck at syllable restrictions.


  • sheltered
    September 14, 2008
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    Into a rude awakening?