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Ancient

 

 

 

 

Insecurity challenges security

as blood-ties drip to belly laugh insanity,

there's more to meet the eye with life experience

as witnesses take the challenge of beauty's nod -

personification is lost if visions slip

to false imagination and open spirits,

ancient souls are roaming these green lands with power,

compassion's plates; revealed to hearts that whisper love.

 

Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation -

where we smile and grip the passions of pure fine grace,

in sighs are folds that make us bow in sorrow's crease,

but also sweet joys which lift us to all sober words.

Engrave spirituality into those dreams

while colours fashion history into warm verse,

and all the while the heavens will create music.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 25

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    Another I had missed somehow! what a good idea of mine this was

    This is an incredible poem. Reaches deep into one's belief system, makes you think. What if it's true ....


  • mgmc gold member
    September 17

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    A great poem. Very well written. I love the phrases, "Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation,""Engrave spirituality into those dreams while colours fashion history into warm verse," and "heavens will create music." Inspirational imagery from a talented poet!


  • InsanityisAmusing
    August 19
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    Absolutely amazing, I adore this poem. You have a great talent. Thank you so much for entering.

    xoxo.


  • PurpleAraucana
    August 18

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    life experience -
    sorrow's sighs,
    joy's words.

    hearts whisper love and
    the heavens create music.

    a grand poem.


  • Net
    August 18

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    Deep

    I like this a lot. Yes - it seems there is more to life ...


  • MassMan
    August 3

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    This is a beautiful and intense poem, but unfortunately does not comply with the criterion for this contest, therefore it can not be considered for placing in this contest.
    Thanks for sharing your work and talent.
    David


  • wandyway
    July 25

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    "while colours fashion history into warm verse,"
    I'm going to try to eat your imagery one day. You can't blame me, actually you can, but you must admit it looks absurdly delicious.

    Thank you for entering you scarily talented man. Good luck


  • consternation imply
    July 20

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    CALCULATING

    That's not the first time I have said that about a poem, but this one is definitely that. A mixture of illogic and logic with a hint of deeply inspiring power points. Love this like crazy.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 14
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    excellent~

    Beautiful
    I read this one twice
    Love the last 2 verses.........but the entire poem is wonderful
    Love the imagery as well
    I posted a new one too hope you drop by can't send you a link remember sighs
    Best of luck in the contest
    This is winner in my book
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Shantti
    July 13
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    Very nice. I like your spiritual outlook on the dark side of life.

    Engrave spirituality into those dreams

    while colours fashion history into warm verse,

    and all the while the heavens will create music.

    I like how you put in ancestors too. Very contemplative and well excecuted piece. Thank you for entering it in my contest


  • xxuglyducklingxx
    July 10
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    2. And when your fear finally subsides by the purest touch, you beg the shadow to remain.

  • xxuglyducklingxx
    July 10

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    Interesting.

    This was a pretty impressive piece. I really enjoyed the flow, and the tone accented the imagery well. Great job on that. What prompt did you use? This was an amazing. Keep up the amazing work.


  • Tarja
    June 21

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    This piece is phenomenal. Your word language is very strong and passionate and lovely. The message within this is also very beautiful. Well done and thank you so much for entering.


  • enlightenedatheist
    June 20

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    your work is always full of so much chaos and disorder. Even if I had not seen your name I would have known right away this was you...best of luck


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    June 16

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    Majestic...

    The mind of a Poet is a creative engine of beauty, wonders and grace to diffuse love, harmony; to learn and to teach; to instruct Solons and to inspire kings and Sovereign queens; to defend art and the language; and to stimulate intuition and imagination.

    “Ancient” is a petal of poetic flower diffusing scent of the major art and knowledge that adds dews of grace, fraternity and humanity throughout its lines ~ enriching every reader’s mind with its intellectual contents; ~ and fills the chalices of the readers’ hearts with the sublimity of its aesthetic.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Blooming Lotus
    May 27

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    Inspiring!

    I think I am getting addicted already...! Your writing is so inspired and inspiring..."Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation"- how true my friend! "...and all the while the heavens will create music." You create music for my mind!
    Excellent as always!

  • LitNup
    May 20

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    Loves especially this line!

    Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation


  • Moroni
    May 19

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    Engrave spirituality into those dreams

    My favorite line! Simply amazing. This poem really held me in the whole time I was reading it. Can't say more than that!

  • Cajunqueen
    May 19

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    art

    its art not poetry , you have to be talented to create art , and I am glad I glimpsed into your worl.


  • woodenspoon
    May 19

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    Only the third poem I have read on here and I am not disappointed. Such a wonderful poem, I read it out loud and it flowed perfectly. You are a fine weaver of words.


  • lianonsidhe silver member
    May 18

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    A wonderful write! Lots of evocative imagery and a deep emotional heart cry. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
    Lianonsidhe


  • whitecoffee
    May 18
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    thanks

    for this art


  • poetryality silver member
    May 18

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    There is a mountain of truth in this line alone;

    "Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation -"

    Your poem gives insight to the reader. It connects us to the spiritual realm through the blood-let that freed us ALL. Indeed, the Creator made us in splendor and beauty and because of that, we too are commissioned to create.

    I never fail to be awestruck after reading and re-reading your words dear friend. This work unlocks mysteries.


    BEAUTIFUL!


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • albymyheart gold member
    May 17

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    Speeechless...love it. Oh, I don't know what to say indi...your words are so powerful...alby


  • Denerica
    May 17

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    Oh Ancient of Days... nice images, visions of color. Excellent write. Thank you for entering. Blessings.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    May 17

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    Impressive work!!!

    Powerful & profound in its truth with great rhythm & a flowing narrative full of depth and rich vocabulary...
    Simply stunning...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Veronica Leigh
    May 17

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    First, I want to say that I love reading your stuff. I always try to do it when I see it on the featured list, or when you've entered a contest.

    I really loved this one, especially the 2nd verse. Very very powerful. I'm very glad I read this one.

    Thank you


  • Junkyard
    May 17
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    great poem always a pleasure reading your poems


  • myrataal silver member
    May 17

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    The intensity of poetry ...

    on your page simply leaves me dumbfounded! How well you've described the ancient process of placing the self within creation and Creator. To read your work, is to page through the Book of Time, reaching the Beginning of Timelessness!

    I loved this poem for its assoncance, too, and for the vividness of its imagery. Thank you, quicksilverman, for making my soul swirl again.

    Love
    Myra


  • Lamia Somnium
    May 16

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    :) I like it.

    I tend to think in colour, and you're words felt purple and some other more intangible colour that was very vivid. I like this poem, it didn't feel like you were trying too hard, like you breathed and it wrote itself from the emotions in that puff of air.


  • ElectricSunSet
    May 16
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    "while colours fashion history into warm verse,

    and all the while the heavens will create music."
    - that was my favourite line. i loved this. it shows much emotion and scene.

    you have to think about it a little, and i like that.
    well that is just my opinion, maybe someone got it straight away.

    but anyway i loved it. please continue the good work.


  • frownsnfreckles
    May 16

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    personification is lost if visions slip

    to false imagination and open spirits

    My favorite lines in the poem, they seem to whisper between the lines as a voice of wisdom from the Ancients.


  • Melodies
    May 16

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    Visiting this poem for a second time and appreciate your particular mindset as you wrote this special penning. Aye, the ancients can still speak to us and we do well to listen to their wisdom. Thank you for sharing your heart here.


  • JinSays gold member
    May 16

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    Something I truly enjoy about your work Ian? I never know what to expect. The last poem I read was a love poem with enough heart in it to argue that person's never known heartache or rejection before. This poem is no different. From the beginning-I expect something along the lines of juggling sharp corners of madness inside your head, while smoking a cigarette and trying in vain not to burn yourself.
    This is completely sweet, peaceful, a bit of a welcome oasis in my morning. Thank you for that. I wish you happy Saturday.
    Love,
    jin


  • Kajal lutchminarian
    May 16
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    A good read

    I loved the use of the vivid descriptions used to convey your thoughts


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    May 15

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    Your words always draw one In, they give such startling visuals and this piece Is no exception
    Another great write from your pen


  • aluna
    May 15
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    I am so in awe of your power of the pen. I love to read your poems. Another great one!

  • dx d by me
    May 15

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    The title gives this great appeal to me...There is a collected wisdom in your writing, a view that takes in more than the moment, more than one eye full. I truly enjoyed the expansive nature of this piece. Geo


  • Mariana gold member
    May 15

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    A good poem displaying all the various thoughts that flit through our brain. 'Insecurity challenges security.' I love that line.

    Mariana


  • hypnorocker
    May 15

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    The constant evolution of life, how we are the combined layering of all past actions, and the life force that guides us so often stems from that deep place inside where the spirits move us with their haunting whispers.. So like the atoms that we have stolen from ancient stars, the only wisdom we can carry are the bits of the collective consciousness that sighs to all, yet only a few have the mind to hear... Your piece speaks to me from this place, and the connection is clear, the true expression of self is the only thing that matters in life, and that gift is something not to be taken lightly....
    So thank you for sharing this with us... Sorry for ranting on so, but it moved me...
    peace,
    hypnorocker


  • Chiisai-half-devil
    May 15
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    ...... I'm speechless, is this an awesome poem and very creative too. good work.


  • Draig aine gold member
    May 15

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    oh where to start at the end perhaps? with the phrase
    Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation - or pick a phrase an other phrase, I just love to ramble amidst your words
    thnak you for sharing your vision my friend


  • just4fun20
    May 15
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    this is good you have a real emotions here just by reading this i can fell it good job


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    May 15

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    revealed to the hearts that whispered love, I love that line its beautiful. Thank you for sharing.


  • LadyElbereth
    May 15

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    I Pause

    Darling your work often takes my thoughts off the beaten path thought provoking most certainly there is one line that stands out to me your last line that gave me great pause ” while colours fashion history into warm verse, and all the while heaven will create music” All I will state is my thank you for being you, darling you already know your brilliant. But I love that you always gift me more of a day than I had anticipated thank you darling.


    Lady E

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    May 15

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    In a list " An Apple in My Underpants" because, perhaps, this piece of poetry dances to the core of the matter " Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation" A song to spirituality, finding faith a comforter to blanket days that may be fruitless, feckless or full of folly.

  • Vilmar Pedersen
    May 15

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    Amazing to read your poem. I'm just new here and it all starts with your wonderful poem with brilliant images and flows so smoothly without any flaws. Thanks so much for sharing this true poetry. - Wilkowski

  • Melodies
    December 16, 2008
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    You took most of your poems away, so I am very most double-triple-and -more glad I have your poetry books at my house. They are wonderfully written. I clicked on this one because the word "ancient" caught my eye. lol


  • poetrandy
    November 2, 2008

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    Super Poem!

    As always, this poem is filled with startling, wonderful and appropriate images! This poem is very well written and is certainly the work of a master! Keep it up, friend!


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 20, 2008
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    Wow, I'm left speechless


  • Emerald Lass
    September 17, 2008
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    Well said, good scribe. Words used in a way only you can do.


  • g r e y i s m
    September 16, 2008
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    nice to read your work. has been awhile.

    hope you're doing well...

    Lea


  • BehindTheShadow
    September 11, 2008

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    Another fine and flawless piece! Where have you been lately? Nevermind, no matter, just glad you are here and giving me some perfection to read!


  • blondeoverblue
    September 10, 2008
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    Just Beautiful!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 10, 2008
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  • Blueskywonder
    September 10, 2008
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    I agree! If we capture the essence of beauty and experience with a spiritual fullness the heavens shall continue to bless us with harmonies from her soulful song. There is much to ponder within these lines of clarity and wisdom. wonderful elegant poetic flow and imagery blossom like with the pride of a sunflower. Thank-you for sharing your creative self with usGreat!


  • Kiran silver member
    September 10, 2008
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    Beautiful imagery throughout this poem. This was simply ourstanding.


  • cheaphotelsign
    September 9, 2008

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    wow..that was absolutely beautiful....masterful words placed in flawless order to form a piece of breathtaking poetry...the last line blew my socks off...you are so good


  • malmadre gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    ...and the beat goes on with the music that heaven creates. I am so glad to see you back in force, my poetic friend. In top form! with a collage of phrases that makes my neurons scatter like no other writer can do.


  • aliceramone
    September 9, 2008
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    a thing of beauty dancing life with the passion of the artist...intoxicating imagery...excellent!

  • dillpickle62
    September 9, 2008
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    Whoa! Beeu-ti-ful!

    Wow....


  • catz Moderators member
    September 9, 2008
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    A deep compilation of the ages, both of mankind in general and of individuals. I'm especially tuned in to the first line of the second stanza... "Tomorrow's an act of today's revelation" I see so much truth and open mindedness in these words.

    It's good to see something new from your talented soul, Ian


    Dee


  • queen Moderators member
    September 9, 2008
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    My soul feels more ancient by the minute, beautiful words pirate

  • Melodies
    September 9, 2008
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    A blessing to see you, fine Sir.

    All lines lead to a beautiful conclusion with the heavens creating music. Aye, the sweet wonder of your words rushes forward to make me smile.

  • chiefmac
    September 9, 2008

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    Ian you have not lost the touch. The reader is drawn into the insanity, of life experience. Challenge of beauty slips to imagination and spirits as anient souls reveal hearts to whisper love. God gives us the heavens to create. This is a wonderful work where the flow and smooth movement between stanza is maintained. The reader welcomes the images laid out as passions desire. Good to read your work.

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