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Light's Hope Flickers

It was Halloween 2007,
When your lady called with the news
You were in the hospital,
My heart sank,
Hoping nothing terribly wrong was going on.
And hope's light flickered.

The tests were confusing to your Mom and i
Conflicting but alarming,
Why did this have to be happening?
Especially now at the happiest time of your life.
Love and Light joy finally in ypur life
And Hope's light flickered...in spite of dread and doubt.

They are going to operate Pop
The words such a shock,
You downplayed it, but a parent knows...
The dread coming,
Cloaked in darkness and despair,
Yet Hope's light flickered...along with fear

Your Love called with good news
Surgery over, still in critical care
Then the disheartening news,
While the anuerysm repair, the kidneys failed
Yet hope's light still flickered

In a Coma for seven days
Your family on pins and needles.
Prognosis was good,
You took things in stride.
And Hope's light flickered...

Then we got the fate ful call,
You had an episode yet were stabilized.
You told me on the phone...
Pop I am Scared...Son so was I
And hopes light flickering way deep down inside

We loaded in a caravan heading to Phoenix
Oh how we wanted to be by your side
So thankful that the one you so loved,
Was faithfully by your side!
And Hope's Light still flickered

On the road for several hours
We hadn't even made it out of the state.
My cell rang with the news we'd hate.
The Doctor choking on his words as we spoke
"I'm so sorry, your son has passed"
And Hope's light had died.

You were the special one son
From the day you were born
What a shame others chose not to see you
For the miracle you were.
Live always a challenge for you.
Yet I still was mad.
Hope's light extinguished

Yet if we believe that the soul lives on
Then you are in a land where limitations are not known
You no longer hurt from your crippled feet
And your heart, and your beautiful bright soul
You are far better off than we,
And Hope's light flickers so brightly again

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 20

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    Gary,
    If you want a solid critique on this one...I just can't do it, least not today. I"m sorry. Honestly, I can only cry and tell you I am so sorry for your loss I'll come back later. I'm sorry I just can't do this right now


  • Harlequin Dance
    September 9, 2008

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    On the last line, are hope and light supposed to be reversed like that? Also, the repitition concerning hope seems out of place in this poem, it's so concrete, but that one line at the end of each stanza is not.