“You grace me with your presence,” she tells
“Storm is passing,” he replies
“Yes,” she pouts, “poppies are beautiful.”
He peers into the longing…
I cross my arms
sifting dreams
Author notes
30 Words
Option #1: http://princess-of-shadows.deviantart.com/art/in-light-and-death-54629840
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- Quickie Anyone??? You Know You Want To... by Sweet Impatience.
720 points, ended September 9, 2008, 8 entries
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I love your interpretation of the prompt. its different, but I really enjoyed it.. I particularly love the last line. excellent use of 30 words.
good luck
kat
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I love your take on this prompt ~ wonderful best of luck in the contest
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Beautiful, the ending...'sifting dreams' like finishing on a sigh, very well captured. Good luck
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nicely done, interesting exchange between the subject and her unseen (former?) lover.
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A lovely interpretation... the familiarity at odds with the stilted words... more to be said but held within... a wonderful moment, captured by your words. Well done and best of luck...
Ken
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Well done, fine construction of the poem and it fits perfectly with the picture you chose to illuminate. I think this should definitely get the first prize.
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No fun being alone. i know those feelings. nice.
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