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Betrayal's Storm

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Once passionate love,
      now constant turmoil
  as ecstacy turns to hate
        in betrayal's storm...

Roses of affection losing beauty,
      bearing poisonous thorns ~
  painful reminders
        of love not meant to be...

 

Author notes

~ this is not about my wife i love you, baby! 

30 words 

image prompt:

http://princess-of-shadows.deviantart.com/art/in-light-and-death-54629840




 

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  • ea silver member
    September 10, 2008
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    an ode to betrayal and the love lost to destiny... it most often is, I'm afraid.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 10, 2008
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    Nice job. Very eloquently executed with so few words. Best of luck in the contest.

    Mike


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    This as usual was brillent my love!
    I loved each line i could feel the pain of this writing. I think at some point we all in our lives have been pricked by the throns.

    Great take sweety,
    Love,
    ~Lisa~


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    WOW

    I truly enjoyed reading this poem. there is such power and intensity within this poem. Excellent use of 30 words. "Roses of affection losing beauty, bearing poisonous thorns" those are my favorite lines. WOW!!
    You did an excellent job on this prompt.

    good luck

    kat


  • CatQueen248
    September 9, 2008

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    I love the end "Roses of affection, losing beauty/bearing poisonous thorns/painful reminder/of love not meant to be." There is pain and beauty in love. Sometimes it works out, other times it does not. But that is because God has different plans for us and maybe another person we are meant to be with. Amazing write and good luck in the contest.


  • aboomer silver member
    September 9, 2008

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    Great wording - and great take - on that picture! So full of depth, loss, pain, anger - well done!!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • MysticalRayne
    September 9, 2008

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    Ahhhh how true ~ you pen brilliance for this prompt ~ best of luck in the contest


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Wow, fab piece, you have really portrayed the twisting emotions well. The first verse is my fave A great 30 words, good luck


  • KayJay
    September 9, 2008

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    Geee ya think? Well done Tim. "Roses of affection..." a wonderful turn of phrase... Excellent and best of luck...
    Ken


  • Rovingone gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Something very painful in these words, description of a ragged reality, which perfectly fits the picture. Especially the words about roses of affection losing beauty and bearing poisonous thorns.

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