Flyblown mind blemished
squalid visions ensue,
stale smile caresses
whispers curse you.
Shackled within
shadows draw near,
time cuts close
devour the fear.
Sinister thoughts revealed,
tainted soul now unsealed.
Author notes
Picture prompt in 30 words. (30)
Picture credit: http://arefinprints.deviantart.com/art/Dark-Queen-15492278
May work on this after 
A contest entry
- Quickie Anyone??? You Know You Want To... by Sweet Impatience.
720 points, ended September 9, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is dark, very lovely. the reader is drawn into squalid visions old smiles and curses. Tainted soul revealed. Nicely penned. Thanks for the read
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woah.
My god your brilliance... it seemed to have lost its impression on me... but you are just amazing... I love the background as well!! Woohoo go you!!
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Now this Gold all the way! You do have a way with darkness...thoughts in our own mind can be more devastating than anything on the outside...love the background, so fitting and dark...
Excellent work!
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*bows to you on your darkened throne* you my friend you have a strong pen there, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest
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Oh hun
What darkness you share in your words
Creepy thoughts paint her mind
Eaten away !
Awesome backgrounds
Congrats on the gold
Julie
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Eeeeppppppppp
That's scary!!! 
Wicked cool poem hunny... back to your sinister best here
Congrats on the Gold!!! 
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love your background sissy, and you have done a wonderful job with the dark as always excellent poem! best to you in the contest ~CC~
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BRILLIANT
You've blown me away with your poem. In just 30 words you've captivated the darkness perfectly. The last 2 lines are what sealed it for me. You've mastered the dark writes perfectly.. I see that I have a great teacher and I have a long way to go & a lot to learn
The background that you've created just makes your poem all the more strong & powerful.
Excellent take on the prompt & Fabulous poem.
good luck
kat
p.s. I'm taking the bg now, thanks
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Mithya
The life we see is not the end; It is like shedding ones old clothes to take on the new ones.
In this understanding where is the evil within or outside. It is just a matter of perceptions which develop as we age without fear.
Congrats for the thoughts that provoke the mind.
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Great wording! Full of the dark bite - goes great with that picture!
best wishes in the contest.
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awesome job here.... i like it.... keep it up..... thanks for sharing and good luck in your contest......!
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Wicked!
Cast like an evil spell. Held me bound, caught in dark well. An intense write. Best of luck in the contest. -
Great flow, excellent imagery...powerful stuff!
Well done. Best of luck in the contest.
Slayer
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Some nice rhyme in there.
Well writ.
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nice rhyme & flow~
disturbing images that work well with the prompt.
well done!
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perfect flow and awesome imagery but then what else would I expect from you..great take on the dark prompt..always had a soft place in my heart for the dark side..hehe..thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings my dear friend...namaste..
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Beautifully written your words speak volumes of magic ~ best of luck in the contest
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Awesome!!!
Loving the darkness here...
Great rhyme that fits perfectly within the 30 word parameters...
Seriously impressive stuff...
Well done!!!
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Wow... words and background... both reflect the darkness you evoke with your wonderful words. (and you even got it all the rhyme LOL). You have shown a mastery of this genre... A fabulous write...
Ken
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