Waiting…
Each day, like a page in a book,
crumpled and static,
a black and white existence.
Waiting…
for you
and returning motion
and the color to fill
my days.
Author notes
Option 6
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://amytk.deviantart.com/art/to-let-the-light-in-50532490
30 words
A contest entry
- Quickie Anyone??? You Know You Want To... by Sweet Impatience.
720 points, ended September 9, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
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Pretty
Well done on the silver! 
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I found this to be a sad poem.. the imagery that you have used through out this poem is not only vivid but very powerful to. waiting for love to bring color back into a world that perhaps it now only black & white. Excellent take on the prompt.
I do have a question for you though.. it's my own little personal pet peeve, the use of and in lines 7 & 8. I guess for me I'm odd in the sense I don't like repetitious words.
good luck in the contest
kat
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wow - you took this picture a lot differently than I did - and did a great job with it! Love the 'black and white existence'.
best wishes in the contest.
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Lovely
Ya, this is my story short and to the point I have a PHD in her. The saga has been 42 years now.
Thankyou for your nice comments on Grasshopper pie. And yes I did see the "cloaked being" only after I wrote it.
I'd love to read your favorite that you've written.
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Thank you for the kind comment... I know which you speak... 41 years for me
... Hmmmm I don't know that I have a favorite... Maybe http://allpoetry.com/poem/4382199 It is one that I thoroughly enjoyed writing... Take care, Ken
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nicely done~
i really like the opening stanza, the imagery, wording all done very well, vivid.
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Bravo! you did a wonderful job in this write! the emotion in this is really beautiful I wish you the best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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I loved this ~ your interpretation of her love filling her pages with color ~ wonderful ~ best of luck in the contest
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Great take on the picture, love how you combined the texture into your write. Good luck
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Very symbolic and it discloses the very deep intention of the artist with the contrast of the figure against a tear in the two color canvas.
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