Oh God
you are hygienic and Simon-pure
while I am not spotless
therefore, you launder me with
a soap of the trials
which are troublesome to experience
yet, inevitable to be perceived
as your child
Oh God...
A contest entry
- God Enters Through The Wound by Envelope.
2600 points, ended September 16, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A very well written poem.
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Like your stuff!
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Really good write. You did a great job. It's really difficult to find such talented artists out there these days, and I believe that you are one of those "diamond in the rough" types! Great and inspiring! Deliciously poetic! Hahaha! lol. I really can't friggin' wait to read more of your works! Keep up the great work and post MORE AWESOME POEMS like this! Thank you so much for sharing....again!
Again....awesome write!
^_^ (Cute, huh?...lol!)
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glad to see the trophy here....though I expected gold for this...
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Yup, we certainly have to go through "trials" unfortunately to grow as a Christian, and they're inevitable - unfortunately. Oh God......
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So i've been reading all these entries, and I keep finding myself surprised with the quality and complete originality I've been finding, so finding yet another mini masterpiece on one of the last entries is just, well it's a kick to the crotch, because you put me in a very hard position for a judge. Oh god is right, what are we to do
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I like this one too.
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great thought, nice picture, unusual and effective vocabulary. good work altogether. keep it up.
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You make the language bend in ways I have not tried before...I always find your poetry so involving that way. And in that vein, you indicate that God uses our trials as a way of speaking to us...and if we are HIS we will understand.
I remember when I was a child I didn't like bathtime at all, it washed away all the dirt that showed what fun I had had while playing...lol
Lovely poem. Best wishes in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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"therefore, you launder me with a
with a soap of the trials
which are troublesome to experience"
A beautiful way of representing our trials as a soap.
Every time you write I am rendered speechless. I loved this so much though it took me like 4-5 times read to really understand it. You use very big words (in meaning).
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Very good
"you are hygienic and Simon-pure
while I am not spotless"
I really like your use of the word "hygienic" and how "not spotless" sounds together.
"therefore, you launder me with a
with a soap of the trials"
I really like these two lines, as well.
I like the feel of desperation in "Oh God..." Although, maybe I only feel desperation.
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