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~Song For Lost Youth~




It was a day to remember,
a flock of seagulls;
dirty pretty things,
reeling around like old fighter pilots
waiting on a war,
their simple minds undecided
whether they were dead or alive.

We reminisced on happy Mondays,
safe in our sanctuary; our soft cell of youth,
not ready for the massive attack
of responsibilities, how that altered images
that we were all saints,
a new order trawling the streets,

heckling manic street preachers
from the darkness of our enigma,
the pseudo visage of bravado,

but in the end we all fell
from the friendly crowded house
into a savage garden,
where everything but the girl was the cure,
and I would take that bullet for my valentine,
as the ten second epic
at a funeral for a friend.









It was A DAY TO REMEMBER,
a FLOCK OF SEAGULLS;
DIRTY PRETTY THINGS,
reeling around like old fighter pilots
waiting on a war,
their SIMPLE MINDS undecided
whether they were DEAD OR ALIVE.

We reminisced on HAPPY MONDAYS,
safe in our sanctuary; our SOFT CELL of youth,
not ready for the MASSIVE ATTACK
of responsibilities, how that ALTERED IMAGES
that we were ALL SAINTS,
a NEW ORDER trawling THE STREETS,

heckling MANIC STREET PREACHERS
from THE DARKNESS of our ENIGMA,
the pseudo VISAGE of bravado,

but in the end we all fell
from the friendly CROWDED HOUSE
into a SAVAGE GARDEN,
where EVERYTHING BUT THE GIRL was THE CURE,
and I would TAKE THAT BULLET FOR MY VALENTINE,
as the TEN SECOND EPIC
at a FUNERAL FOR A FRIEND.

Author notes

"Music is the only thing that makes sense"

Bullet for my valentine - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bullet_For_My_Valentine
The Cure - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_cure
Soft Cell - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Soft_cell
Flock of seagulls - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Flock_of_seagulls
All saints - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/All_Saints_(band)
New order - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/New_order
Manic street preachers - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Manic_street_preachers
Enigma - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Enigma_(band)
Simple minds - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Simple_Minds
Savage garden - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Savage_garden
Massive attack - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Massive_attack
Dead or alive - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dead_or_Alive_(band)
Crowded house - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Crowded_house
The Darkness - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Darkness
Take that - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Take_That
Dirty pretty things - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dirty_Pretty_Things_(band)
The Streets - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_streets
Happy Mondays - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Happy_Mondays
Altered images - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Altered_Images
Everything but the girl - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Everything_but_the_girl
Visage - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Visage
A day to remember - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A_Day_To_Remember
Funeral for a friend - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Funeral_for_a_friend
Ten second epic - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ten_Second_Epic

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  • outofbreath
    October 13, 2008
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    Such Flow!
    I am truly amazed by this poem, the words seem to morph together and I did not in any part think that the band names were forced or didn't fit. You really took this prompt and ran with it!
    "but in the end we all fell
    from the friendly CROWDED HOUSE
    into a SAVAGE GARDEN,
    where EVERYTHING BUT THE GIRL was THE CURE,"
    Fantastic!

    *~ ICE

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  • hotpinkpenguin
    October 5, 2008

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    wow, I would not have been able to do this prompt, but you did it amazingly! great job and you deserve the gold =]


  • feetus
    October 5, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt! This was fun to read & you wrote it very well. *laughs* Flock of Seagulls...You know, alot of people make fun of them...but when their songs come on the radio, noone changes the station
    G'luck in the contest


  • Alyzeh
    October 4, 2008
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    Woah! This is incredible!


  • RockBandPromoter
    September 15, 2008
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    I smell a champion

    Woooo what can I say? A champion deserves a trophy..you do!!! Reward this poet someone please.


  • Ringwaith
    September 11, 2008

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    Excellent job blending all the bands together, although there were a few I have never heard of, but that's just my age speaking. Good luck in the contest


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    September 11, 2008

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    I feel inadequate now Your work is amazing great use of all those bands check mine out if you wouldn't mind


  • ratkos
    September 10, 2008
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    You used alot of my favorite bands.This was awesome.VERY IMPRESSIVE.GREAT JOB!!!!!!!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 10, 2008
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  • vici377
    September 9, 2008

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    God..your genius continually blows me away..what can't you do?..and i am being very SERIOUS..dammit..this is freaking phenomenal...and all of those bands in this write..wow..thanx so much for sharing my friend..this one will be bookmarked..best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..

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