As the lady in black dances,
The silver blade whispers.
Against her you have no chances,
As she craves blood much crisper.
Dancing around in her cloak,
The look in her eyes summon you.
It is in your blood she wants to soak,
As she looks right through,
The windows of your soul.
As she swirls softly in the trees,
To own you is her goal.
She is not easy to appease.
As you beg for her to spare,
Your life, she grins wickedly.
You better say your last prayer,
You fear her being a black wiccan.
She casts her deathly spell,
As you feel your life slipping.
Her eyes burn the fire of hell,
As it's your throat she's gripping.
Your life given to the Lady in Black,
You slow painfull suffering is now over.
As now you lay under your plaque,
Heaven...is just like clover.
Author notes
Option is the main picture
A contest entry
- Another option contest by Sadistic klown girl.
375 points, ended September 25, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ERG........Whatever You Effin Want by fairytalelovestory.
400 points, ended October 6, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOWEEE I LOVE THIS!!! Amazing, I really couldn't have done any better then this, you have the imagery so perfect!! I love your pictures and I love the way youve written this, welldone you should have got gold!!!
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Geeeze I aint sleeping with my bedroom light off tonight!
Do I still have any heart remedy left in stock? Geeze puts you off working in a 'Reeces Negative' blood transfusion centre .... yikes this one is sure scary and blood curdling, prefer a slice of toast myself, but then I am only human, unlike this crazy gal her cloak has clouded her mind!
Brilliant atmospheric scary write, I reckon you should go in for writing horror stories as well! No wonder Judge Smudge Stevens was growling and hissing at something unseen on our landing today!
Don't blow the candle out tonight ok!
Brill write, write more ok! Love it, well done! Bravo!
Loads of hugs & Love
Mum & Judge Smudge Stevens
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Nice and dark - just the way I like 'em! I love the imagery you use, and the flow is pretty much right on. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you tons
I'm really glad you like it!
I tried quite hard with this one as I'm useless at writing but I feel it came out okay
thank you again
Karlie
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Great
Wonderfully written. Very dark. Thank you for joining my contest and I wish you the best of luck. Keep up the good work -
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Thanks so much for your lovely comment I glad you liked it thank you
Karlie
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