Elated spirit leaves flesh behind
as I soar starwards,
euphoric light with a lilac hue
cloaks any feeling
other than bliss.
And as my Goddess drifts
forwards to embrace me,
our cordial cotton hearts
merge gracefully together;
more elegance than a soaring dove.
I've been waiting for this time
for far too long,
and as I savor the beauty of
my lifeless love we rise
ever higher through the lonely stars,
to be entwined together for millennia.
I will never truly die,
that I can assure you.
Salvation accepted me with a loving smile,
and as that omniscient eye
chaperones the universe,
a golden sentinel in a clouded time,
I know it will spill
a tear
for me.
Author notes
This was written for a... phenomenal piece of art: 'Prepare for the Light' by JoAn Greinert. (Option 19) It spoke to me with emotion that I had to work really hard to find the words for, but I'm happy I undertook the challenge.
This one really took some doing, I have tried my hardest not to let the picture down, let me know what you think please people!
(Yes, I know starwards isn't a real word but I thought it would make a nice exaggeration of skywards, especially with the content of both the poem and the painting)
A contest entry
- JoAn Greinert - Intuitive Artist - Works of Art - Multiple Prompts Contest by Kazytc.
2400 points, ended September 17, 2008, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - COME ONE! COME ALL! QUICKY FOR 200 PEOPLE! by Umi Juvariel.
800 points, ended January 21, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The only thing that bothered me about this piece wasn't the words, it was the colors you chose. They hurt my eyes. But anyway, I loved this piece, for it was so perfectly descriptive, yet vague where it needed to be. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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Wow beautiful sentiments!
Love the beautiful sentiments, loved this bit..
I will never truly die,
that I can assure you.
Salvation accepted me with a loving smile,
and as that omniscient eye
chaperones the universe,
a golden sentinel in a clouded time,
I know it will spill
a tear
I found the page hard to read because of the white text on the bright pink BG so had to run my mouse over the text to highlihgt it to read, and to review I had to keep doing the same.
Your words though are beautifully penned and they say a lot about your fantastic talent as a poet with a beautiful mind and unique throughts and what flow and rhyme too, wow brilliant, love it! Write on!
Thanks Millions for entering it was an honour to have you in our contest.
Please come back and enter my future contests ok!
Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions!
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Quite Insightful!!!
Quite Insightful!!! Brings me right into another level of the painting……a strong message for hope……..Great Job!
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wow that is deep and fantastical!
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Oh! Sorry, I already commented, but as soon as I sent it, I saw something I really loved in your poem:
"as I savor the beauty of
my lifeless love we rise..."
Love that line. So gorgeous in the word choice. Lifeless love. Beautiful. Very lovely.
Your words are striking to the soul.
Take care.
Shannon -
Very descriptive. And very powerful in words. You captured the paiting entirely. Great work. Just simply beautiful.
Keep writing,
Shannon
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starwards is a great word
very beautiful descriptions
"
And as my Goddess drifts
forwards to embrace me,
"
Please consider changing "forwards" to "forward". I feel it would be easier to read aloud that way.
The first stanza is my favorite.
There's something that just tugs at my heart about this poem. Well penned indeed!
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wow
This poem is amazing! I love it, there's so much power. And who cares if "starwards" isn't a word? It is now!
Much Love and Keep Writing,
-Alicia Lynn
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hmmm....well, there were a few typos...but I liked your descriptions a great deal...
I would say my favorite lines are....
'Salvation accepted me with a loving smile,
and as that omniscient eye
chaperones the universe,
a golden sentinel in a clouded time,
I know it will spill
a tear'
good job.
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I love the words you used for this
great job -
Love it!
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I really enjoyed this read. Well penned, poet.
Be well,
Slayer
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