The screen, this thing I've given a life of it's own
Seems to stare back at me; Dumbfounded
Perhaps a reminder of my bland life
Or the fact that I may have lost track of time
More personal now then the human touch
It absorbs most of my midnight thoughts
Creating a void where reality ceases to exit
And make believe is a mirror for my mind
But the inner heart; Where good and evil reign
Has it been broken down by false imaginations
And have I stopped seeing life in it's true form
The click of the keys, all the noise I now know
And the suffering of the many cast aside
This machine now my prison ,captivating
I sense my human side decaying
And feelings of appreciation for love lost.
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Why by charmander13.
700 points, ended December 24, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
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Are you asking why you're letting this blinking screen take over your life? Lol, this is a question that I have asked myself countless times too! (Okay, or it's probably more related to the TV, cos the Internet is possibly one of the most amazing inventions ever...)
Anyhow, thank you so much for entering and all the best to you!
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Wow!!! I love this...it is so true...after joining the internet I came here to All Poetry to write poetry.
My daughter warned me of the dangers of the internet and made me promise that I would never give my address to anyone, I promised.
I joined All Poetry just over a year ago, and I am so surprised how much I have come to know, like, and even love some people here...it is sort of a strange
feeling how much your feelings and emotions can be touched through Poetry...I stand amazed.
This is a great write and I love it!!!
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I totally get this! My computer became my life for the last 1.5 years as I was pretty much home-bound due to pain.. it's easy to let it take over...
I don't think you'll ever lose your human side Bob!
Brilliant free-verse write!
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thought provoking
Incredible write...and so true. It's amazing how you can become intertwined in other peoples lives and problems..very well written. Thank you for sharing. Have a great day.
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WONDERFUL Poem
You are so right Bob Your poems always speak to me loud and clear.
We get so absorbed in other's lives and problems. Even thoughh they are but a picture and words on the screen and sometimes a voice on the phone, even so, there can be great friendships and relationships formed. It takes alot of trust and as you know there are many deceiful people too. We need sift through the garbage and find what is true and real as we sometimes get hurt along the way. This was a delight to read this morning. Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Great write my friend on using the computer. Many times people get side track and use the computer for the wrong reason. Alot of cyber chat is all it is not even knowing who you are talking to. Its easier to speak behind a screen for some. Than others use it the way it was meant to be used and have fun. Nothing wrong with corresponding with others just do it in the correct way.
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outside of work, my screen is where i live. Maybe it really is an age thing or maybe it's because I can always shut it down when it gives flack.
Joe
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Many I am sure can ....
relate with this piece that you have penned here bob...I, in many ways can too. ut aas we get older I think it is sometimes more comfortable for us to communicate online...seems less threatening somehow....but not too fulfilling...You made your point great here Bob...Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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I usually don't like to do the interpretation or to suggest what a writer meant to say, mostly because I find it hard for one to know an artist's feeling as he wrote the words on the paper.. So I don't give comments in a form of "interesting view on...", not that I find it for something wrong, but I just don't like to do it in that way.. As for this poem, I can only say I truly felt it, as someone's...anyone's feeling of getting lost between reality and a nightmare taking over the throne of it, and a struggle that goes through... Very vivid insight of it, too... Beautiful work.
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This is one of the best poems I've read by you, Bob. The idea that real life is being overtaken by cyber life (or any form of escapist obsession) is not new, but you express it really well and the line "I sense my human side decaying" is very chilling and says it all.
A powerful write, my friend.
Best wishes,
Bill
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Do you really believe that love exists??...it's an illusion we all promise ourselves of having at some point in our lives.Even though your human body is declining,receedng back to futility I think that your faith in love was lost many years ago.You give your life to an inanimate object to distance yourself further from the outside world's intrusion...best not to acknowledge emotions,denial is safe is it not?
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An interesting view on life as we know it. Many of us spend hours in this new environment, caring not to mix with the world around us. Television feeding us with commercialised nonsense, the news filling our homes with news of famine and disasters world wide. It is the new way to interact, and one that so many of us get release from the pressures of every day life, from work, from nosey nieghbours, even family at times. The knowledge gained from learning from others words, the warmth felt in reading a certain write. But more importantly, the closeness in which friendships can be made. Some taken from within the screen to a parallel world through telephone, or meetings, and not just words on a pixellated screen.
yes a prison for some, but so much a contact with the outside world as we would like it to be for others. The opportunity to help others grow, to give thoughtful measure to think on, as you have here.
As gaylene so rightly said, a very thought provoking write indeed. well done Bob.
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A very thought provoking piece Bob and well said
I spend most nights here as well, but the days are still full and loaded with reality.
Thank you for sharing.
Gaylene
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Great job. I have seen many people become addicted to cyber life. It is very sad to me when I see the break down of human interactions. This is a great poem Bob. These words stand out the most for me:
But the inner heart; Where good and evil reign
Has it been broken down by false imaginations
And have I stopped seeing life in it's true form
The click of the keys, all the noise I now know
Keep up the good work.
Mike
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"I sense my human side decaying"
Oh I know that feeling only too well; sometimse it's like I have to physically take myself from the computer because there is such an incrediable amount of life on here - and yet, most of it is nothing more than virtual.
Amazing job of putting all this to words though!
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I wonder how many have made a life with the screen in front of them. Circumstances limit ones freedom to wander and have multiple persona. A somewhat sad look at a delicate situation. As a poem it is well constructed with excellent flow and presentation.
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Bob
At times I think it honestly sets me back. I think some do become a prisoner of the screen waiting for a real life expereience to jump out and maybe bit them on the ass. lol -
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Maybe you should look at the option of taking the weight off your "bunny" and make that life experience happen. I don't have a serious problem of becoming a prisoner of the screen. I have eye problems and must get away from it to rest them for the next session. I spend a lot of time outside that way.
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