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Thanks For Listening

Dear Love,

Today was the worst day ever.
She talked as if I had never loved him.
Like my love for him never existed.
She talked about him like he was never good enough for her,
When he's everything I ever want.. I ever wanted.
She's my friend, but I'm having to put on that plastic smile
And laugh away at her demeaning attitude of my heart, my love.

Staring into the face of an angel,
Who I know means no harm,
But is stabbing me a million times with a dull, dull knife.
The innocent angel has no clue her words are razor sharp,
Sharp enough to cut me at the seams,
To cut open the floodgates of my heart.

I'd never hurt her like she hurt me.
Never admit that she was impaling me with abusive words,
I could never do that to her.
I'll just take the pain,
He's always been there to take it from me
And crumple my paper thoughts and throw them away forever.

He's holding my hand to the end,
Making sure I won't fall.
Even though she talked about him like he was nothing,
He knows that I talk about him like he's everything.
I'll laugh to myself over and over again,
Laughing because I've never met someone so blind... Colorblind..

He salvaged what was left of my horrid evening,
Picked up the broken pieces and put them back together again.
The security of his hand keeps my waves of emotions at bay,
The angel of my dreams, and of my nightmares,
Watching over me,
Breaking and putting my heart back together all in one breath...

                                                      Thanks for listening,
                                                            The Fixed Broken Lover.

Author notes

ChunkyC

Tuesday Prompt: write a diary entry. Almost as if you were actually writing in your diary/journal/etc. Form it into your own thoughts & emotions. Make it powerful & captivating to read :]

Not too amazing at diary entries.
My poem book is my diary, my journal.
I kinda just went with it.
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  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 9, 2008

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    Wowww. I shouldn't really be surprised, because you're an amazing writer alltogether, but this poem immediately stood out to me. I love how you're so incredibly honest & pure; it's so hard to find people like that nowadays. Veryvery well written. My favorite line in the entire poem had to be:

    - I'm having to put on that plastic smile
    ...

    I just LOVED how you wrote that one line. Plastic, as in not real and flimsy and remarkably easy to destroy. I love that ! Wonderful metaphor

    -He's always been there to take it from me
    And crumple my paper thoughts and throw them away forever.
    ...

    Also, very beautifully written. I love how you put that together :] Thanks for entering, keep it up, & good luckkk ! ♥


  • she still smiles x gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Whoaaa

    This was so beautiful and amazing!!! I really loved how you wrote this in such a different perspective, full of emotion and incredibly powerful I also enjoyed the way you ended this!

    *She's my friend, but I'm having to put on that plastic smile*
    That line jumped out at me, only I'm not sure why. Maybe because I've done it so many times before?

    *Sharp enough to cut me at the seams,
    To cut open the floodgates of my heart.*
    Very powerful, I liked how you used such a strong word as 'floodgates' instead of something unoriginal.

    I love how you wrote with such honestly! Captivating piece, best of luck, and thanks so much for entering our contest

    <3