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Finding Strength

Missing image

Broken heart bleeding deep within,
lost and lonely when it did begin.
Piercing pain through shattered dreams,
broken down into cries with screams.

Deep in my soul, darkness prevails,
losing a loved one this never fails.
Grieving loss is a breakdown for sure,
sadness of heart, ever so pure.

Processing through, learning to fight,
starting to see some flickering light.
Denial sets in in order to cope,
getting by with a glimmer of hope.

Rocking back and forth from anger to pain,
negotiating with life just to sustain.
Time drifts by day by day, 
learning again just how to play.

Accepting life through embracing,
finding new purpose while tracing
every detail, while reminiscing loved one's past,
finding new strength that will eternally last.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Written by: Kelle Marie Stavron

September 8, 2008

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

My Quote: Negotiating With Life Just To Sustain

 

 

Artistic Credit: Is famous artist JoAn Greinert
I chose: OPTION # 16:
"Breakdown to Breakthrough"
By JoAn Greinert

To The Reader,

 

I personally lost my son just September 16, 2007 at the young age of only twenty-four. Oh it has been so painful and I most definitely haven't arrived through the full process. I'm sure I will always grieve, so it seems, the loss of my precious son, he was my child and way to young. His name is Matthew William Stavron in which much of my poetry is written about. Please be sensitive to the realities of a grieving parent or any person dealing with such a loss. Thank you very much, Kelle Marie.


When I personally looked at the picture you could see the Breakthrough of light shining out from one's Breakdown of heart.
From having a Breakdown of loss for all people there is a process of healing that has to take place in order to reach a breakthrough.
Within my poem there are the 5 stages which one needs to process to get to the point of a Breakthrough.

1. Pain
2. Anger
3. Denial
4. Negotiating
5. Acceptance

 

Thank you for reading,

Blessings

Kelle Marie Stavron

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  • Allison
    March 9

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    This is just beautiful.

    Denial sets in in order to cope,
    getting by with a glimmer of hope

    This line especially is so relatable for anyone reading this work. I can feel the emotion radiating from it. I'm so very sorry for your loss.


  • Still Standing gold member
    February 25

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    wow!

    Now I must say this is simply beautiful beyond words. After reading your author notes I have realized that losing love and picking up the pieces applies to so much more than romantic relationships. I admit that is what I was thinking when I made the contest but this is so refreshing and a wondeful take on the theme! I love this part:

    Processing through, learning to fight,starting to see some flickering light.Denial sets in in order to cope,getting by with a glimmer of hope.

    I can see the stages you describe clearly as well even before readin your AN. Thanks for enterin and good luck!


  • FallenFromGrace1102
    January 16
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    Beautiful heartfelt write. Keep up the beautiful work. I'm sorry for your loss. I wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering this piece. I really liked the lines:

    "Rocking back and forth from anger to pain,
    negotiating with life just to sustain.
    Time drifts by day by day,
    learning again just how to play."

    *~*bee*~*


  • Roaddog Wolf
    November 14, 2008
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    What could i possibly

    add to all the wonderful comments so many fine folks have already said. A whole lot a heart, more than words alone can say, yet you found a way. What makes poetry, Rhyme or reason? A heart with reason to rhyme with time. All of which you have reached my soul with ,brilliant write.


  • stitched-heart
    November 7, 2008

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    still on step one here. you poem gave me something to look forward too though... great write, thank you!


  • thejollytinker
    November 7, 2008
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    Kelle,
    Still working on #5, got nothing left to negotiate with. Michael draws much of my attention away, but it's gonna hurt for a while yet. Thanks for your poem- sounds silly, but I like the way you organized it into the process! Made me feel better, that's all.


  • Away From the Sun
    November 6, 2008

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    This is so truly lovely...I relate so well to your words. I yearn for the healing you seem to have found. Thank you so much for saying what is so hard for me to say! Debbie


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    November 6, 2008

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    Healing!

    This is an amazing write that catalogs the process your going through. You articulate the process well.

    Love these two stanzas in particular:

    Processing through, learning to fight
    starting to see some flickering light.
    Denial sets in in order to cope,
    just getting by with a glimmer of hope.

    Dancing back and forth with anger to pain,
    negotiating with life just to sustain.
    While time seems to be passing day by day
    learning again just how to play.

    Your last stanza, that ties everything together so nicely, is an ending to the poem but a declaration of the start of a newness of life! Bravo! Glad you won that trophy!


  • penman gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    Excellent

    Such a powerful creation. As always it flows so well from the heart. Congrats on the honorable mention


  • Kazytc
    September 17, 2008

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    Wow so emotive and feeling!

    This was penned straight from your loving heart, and you are so empathic and moving, lovely rich imagery and depth of feeling here and so well penned on rhyme and flow too. You have given this painting a soul and made it feel and more than merely a 2 dimensional essence. Well done on this its lovely as are you for w riting it, and hey what talent, wow fantastic read!
    Thanks Millions for entering it was an honour to have you in our contest.
    Please come back and enter my future contests ok!
    Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions!
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


  • UniversalVoice
    September 17, 2008
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    Far reaching

    Far reaching within the depth of this painting! Fabulous !!! Thank you.


  • inspired-8 gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    beautiful...

    "Dancing back and forth with anger to pain,
    negotiating with life just to sustain.
    While time seems to be passing day by day
    learning again just how to play."

    This is a winner very well penned Kelle
    hugs
    vic


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    I'm amazed what you are seeing in these paintings.. I see nothing! But then I read what you've written and it so clearly fits the pictures that it stuns me!

    This is such a powerful emotional write.. showing the different aspects of grief that people go through when faced with this... and then the ending being full of strength and hope for the future to be able to find new purpose.

    Beautiful hun!


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    September 11, 2008
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    good luck in the contest
    this was a very strong write


  • poppa
    September 11, 2008

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    a very moving and heartfelt piece... I also hope it was in some ways therapeutic for you... love the soft flow and rhythym to this piece, and offer support and love... good luck in the contest


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Oh wow, was this ever deeply beautiful
    and so well-crafted.

    Loved the rhyme and flow
    it was great

    Best of luck in the contest!


  • Talking Toni gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Very Good!!!

    You are so positive in this piece Kelle...Even though you detail yor grief from Matt's passing, you still show perserverence and the desire to accept what is and keep pressing on!!! I am impressed with this piece and the rhyme is awesome as well!!! Thanks for sharing this poem with me Kelle!!!~~Toni~~


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Oh my dear sweet Toni. Thank you so much for your loving encouraging comment to my poem as well as the fact you know me so well that you could read right through the lines of my poem. I just love you so much my dear sweet sister and friend.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love Always
      Kelle Marie


  • moluv10
    September 9, 2008

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    A wonderful write here sis! I love the deepness of this. You always write so well and you inspire me through your words. Your flow and rhyme is just great. Best of luck in the contest.


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Oh Maurice you are so wonderful. Your comment of loving encouragement means the world to me. You sharing that my poetry has impacted yours blesses my heart. For your poetry has impacted my life and poetry as well.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love Always
      Your Sis & Friend
      Kelle Marie

  • goalsv
    September 9, 2008

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    Just great, a very deep poem that definantly comes from the heart. Shows pain and hurt with a touc of hope.


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Oh you are so good to me and take the time to read my poetry. You know me so well and have been so encouraging with my life circumstances as well as my poetry and my journey in the process of healing. Thank you for you comment.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love
      Kelle Marie


  • Karlie67
    September 9, 2008

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    I completely agree with Slayer it's really great and there is no forced rhyme, well done

    Karlie
    xx


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Oh Karlie thank you so much for your very kind encouraging comment on my poem. I so appreciated you sticking up for me with the rhyme in my poem with Slayer. I went over it many of times and I too have to agree the rhyme was just fine.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love
      Kelle Marie


  • Riamh
    September 9, 2008

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    You nailed it! A wonderfully written poem, full of pain and emotion.....forced rhyme? I think not.

    Slayer


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Oh Slayer thank you so very much for your encouraging comment on my poem. I'm glad you liked it for I so admire your work as well.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love
      Kelle Marie


  • Nicada silver member
    September 9, 2008

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    Wow! Great job on this poem relating to the picture prompt! Your rhyme is great and your poem is filled with such deep emotion. This is a beautiful write and I wish you all the best in the contest. Blessings, Patty


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Wow! Thank you so much Patty for this wonderful encouraging comment for my poem and the contest. Oh yes deep emotions for sure, just seems that is how I write these days with what my life has been dealt with this past year in losing my son.
      Wishing You Many Blessings Too
      Much Love Always
      Kelle Marie


  • thejollytinker
    September 9, 2008

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    Do you?

    Hell, I think you pulled it off! Couplets are a confining mistress to be sure. I read some of the comments. I may be a bit dull, but I don't see this as forced or strained? Don't know much about art, but I know what I like- my cliche for the day...


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Oh hun you are so beautiful. I just love you and so appreciate your loving support in my poetry. Your words are so encouraging to me. And of course I've so needed them these days.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love Always
      Kelle Marie


  • Cannonsfire
    September 9, 2008

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    This is lovely, your emotion and love is felt in this and also the sense of working towards getting better and although we never forget it gets easier to move forward. It is just lovely. C


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much for commenting on my poem. I see you have a deep understanding personally of what I've been going through at what my poems is about.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Kelle Marie


  • Angelflower
    September 9, 2008

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    I think that you created something heartfelt and beautiful in it's own way.. You really put a lot of emotion into this write and it shows.. You did a wonderful job.. Thank you very much for sharing.. Best of luck in the contest!


    Angel


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your very kind comment on my poem. Oh yes there is a lot of emotion in this write, having lost my son this emotion runs very deep withing me so it never seems to fail to come out in my poetry. If you notice within the poem it shows the 5 stages of emotional processing from loss. Pain, Anger, Denial, Negotiating, Acceptance. I was a bit amazed myself that all that was in there.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Much Love Always My Friend
      Kelle Marie


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    It did seem to me that in some places the rhyme may have been a little forced, but it was a great poem overall. I especially loved the second stanza. You did an excellent job of portraying emotion.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


    • stavykm gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment. I appreciate poets different opinions on my poetry. It always helps me to learn and re-evaluate what I have written. Although you may feel some of the ryhme was forced, I've read over it a few times and I would have to disagree. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
      Wishing You Many Blessings
      Kelle Marie

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