On the other side of heaven
Will the Angels sing as sweet
As the ones who hover closely
'Round the blessed Saviors feet?
Will the streets be just as golden?
Will the living waters flow?
On the other side of heaven
Guess it's not for me to know
If I make it there to heaven
Sure, will be by skin of teeth
I don't think there'll be a party
Nor a" welcome home child" wreath
And my house won't be a mansion
Tucked beside those pearly gates
On the other side of heaven
I just wonder what awaits
Should I miss the boat to heaven
Time and time alone will tell
Should I stand there looking outward
From those fiery lakes of Hell
I'll not care about the stature
Of how close to God I'd be
For the other side heaven
Would have looked damn good to me
A contest entry
- Let's Talk About Heaven by Poesing.
600 points, ended September 10, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Coolness
Top-Notch Writing, as always.
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Well done on the gold, most of your poems deserve at least one
I'm not sure if I believe in heaven. Well I know I don't but...that's irrelevent! This is such a beautiful piece, full of...guilt maybe, that the person in the poem has done bad things but could still get to heaven. I know there is often a distinction between the poet and the person "saying" the poem, but either way...I don't know what I'm trying to say lol.
It's awesome, let's leave it at that.
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congrats on the gold for this! I think it's sad and funny at the same time. Your rhyme and meter are spot on as usual. I think (just my opinion of course) that there is a special place reserved just for poets. God knows we couldn't write without experiencing life, both good and bad. He knows also that because we write, people who read us are comforted. That must count for something. I pray for you and yours ... knowing He listens.
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This is fantastic, you have a wonderful way with words. I'm positively green with envy ^_^
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P.S.
The background really adds to your poem, as well. Sorry, I forgot to mention that in my "first" review. -
I love this!
The rhyme and story within is great! I really enjoyed this and especially the last line!
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