You make yourself seem so appealing,
but you are a leader that wears a disguise.
Reward anyone who is greatful,
and that falls to the trap of your lies.
Look down on me cause I stand here,
laughing at your fake throne.
I know what you crave is not worth it,
for you're merely searching for a clone.
Their acquiescence astounds me,
how could they be foolish enough.
To bowe down to what they don't understand,
just because it appears to be tough.
The leader he molds the clay in his hands,
attempting to shape a rality.
"An indestructible master of war",
believing he has immortality.
I'm afraid to say that I won't fall to your games,
so you have lost my unfortunate friend.
For nothing in life is invincible,
your tyranical rain it will come to an end.
I will not sacrifice my intellegence,
to bowe down and believe in a lie.
Continue to tell me of my bleak future,
and I'll still choose not to comply.
but I cannot take pity on ignorant drones,
so I'll silently watch as they perish in fire.
Laughs and sarcasm grow within me,
and I shall smile as the flame rises higher.
You're flaunting your options to me one last time,
and asking me "what it's gonna be."
I think my decision's quite obvious,
there's no doubt that I choose to be free.
Author notes
Monday prompt, choose from the following titles.
Well, of course as always I must shamelessly plug my sources. This was inspired by lyrics to disturbed's latest single and title track, Indestructible. I must also however credit the other 3 songs I was listening to while composing this piece, and I guess they subconsciously took their role. Megadeth's Of Mice And Men, Mushroomhead's Sun Doesn't Rise, and Fuel's Won't Back Down.
What to say about this piece, other than it's obvious controversial viewpoint. I will say the following shamelessly.
Fighting the war on terror. Huh, really? Or perhaps it's just a clever way of saying, "at least if you're going to be terrorized, wouldn't you rather it be by your own government than the hands of a foreigner?"
Treading on another country's ground in the name of freedom. If you disagree with my standpoint, then please explain to me just who is being freed?
I'm not suggesting their dictatorship was a good way of living, but I am suggesting this simple question. What the hell gives us the right to Americanize other countries? Don't worry, I'll answer the burning question. The "war machine" breathes proffit motive.
Fighting for America's freedom. Yep, the freedom to choose whatever supplier you want to buy gas from. But wait....
Oh that's right, we don't have a choice. I could go on all night but I'll wrap it with a simple question. So who exactly is winning here? Maybe, I'm the only one that doesn't get it.
A contest entry
- [♥]Poetry Challenge[♥] by innocence jaded.xx.
3500 points, ended October 28, 2008, 61 entries
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Excellent use of rhyme hon.
I rarely like rhyme, so that's a compliment in itself!
The subject matter is excellent. It's nice to see something on a real issue, that rarely seems to be addressed.
Keep in mind, though, that a comma does not need to be used at the end of every sentence.
A comma should be used to cause pause for the reader, and a full stop so that they will reflect on their words.
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You, my friend have a well out-spoken voice and I agree with what you have to say about our Government...This poem speaks volumes about making the choice, to either turn our heads and just go with the flow or take a stand and be free...Our ancestors came here, for freedom and then later enslaved another country, while killing off the natives of this one...hmmm, makes me disappointed and ashamed to be white at times...And despite what many argue to me about the whole war on terror, it's just an ego builder for our lame ass Prez...They had a clear shot more than once on the leader on terror and backed away, and his name is at the top of the list on the most wanted...It's all one big media joke, to distract the country from what they really want to accomplish, screw us over...anyway, I'll put the duct-tape back over my mouth and be a good American...GRRRRRRR
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Whoaaa, this was very well penned & put together ! One thing I love about your poems, is you explain them in your Author's Notes as well, giving the reader a background on the poem & basically life itself. Well written
-Their acquiescence astounds me,
how could they be foolish enough.
To bowe down to what they don't understand,
just because it appears to be tough.
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Beautiful vocabulary choice! I also love your rhyme scheme, as it wasn't forced at all. Very VERY well penned. Keep it up, thanks for entering, & good luckkk
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Interesting. Not bad, great message, but you know me, I'm all for any poem that takes a stab or two at the government. Good luck in the contest.
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