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Whirlpool

 

Row away!

Put forth effort for your soul!

 

 

       If the rapids weren't enough,

 

(Good God,

You know they're

more than we can handle!)

 

 

         there's a spiral downstream!,

 

   and downwardly does it drag,

keeping lovers, addicts, them corpulent cats, those fake folk

 

         lost in thier own thoughts...

 

 

 

    Ripped apart,

      there will always be

  water in thier ears because of this.

 

 

A reminder to the wise: 

 

 We are not gods.

   

  Free will

  is not freedom.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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