Callous abandonment,
swelters through the ivy enlaced shaft.
As her dreams splinter,
from the sound of a dying chortle.
For her bridegroom stands above,
his eyes shining enigmatically as he gloats,
"Adawa 'ch at rote 'm 'n waedlyd briodasferch achos 'm enaid ydy rancid at 'r berfedd.
Fel Anfona 'ch i mewn i burdan i mewn 'm stead , achos Cara 'ch."
Author notes
Picture Credit: http://h-ybrid.deviantart.com/art/Because-I-love-you-73317732
60 words exactly
Translation:
“I leave you to rote my bloody bride
for my soul is rancid to the core.
So I send you into purgatory in my stead,
because I love you.”
I wrote it in Welsh
A contest entry
- PIF Picture Prompt – Dark Love by KayJay.
700 points, ended September 14, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know how I did....
Comments
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A creative use of language adds that element of strangeness to this dark write and brings out the emotions needed to complete the picture... An excellent write and a worthy entry... All my best...
Ken
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this is awesome. I absolutely love this poem. the fact that you wrote part of it in another language is outstanding. thank for the translation. Fantastic job with the poem and with the prompt.
good luck
kat
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Excellent job! First class and original. Keep it up, this one is definitely worth the gold!
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So I just went and looked at the pic.....and you really just blew me away!!!! w00t!!! Awesomeness!!
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You totally ROCK!!! I absolutely love that you are so willing to write in other languages and that you do it so splendidly.....Another stunning piece by you....Best wishes!!
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wow.. gaelic
Awesome.
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this is really good. good luck.
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