I dreamt of travel past the earthly sphere
with seraphim to guide me on my way
to stand before the One to whom I pray,
whose sublime presence I could never fear.
She clasps me gently to her cushioned breast
and feeds me with the beverage of life
protecting me from further pain and strife
acknowledging that I'm forever blessed.
The God I worship takes a female form
to symbolize the gentle and the meek
with golden cloak to hide us from the storm
and blandishments to turn the other cheek:
a mother hen who keeps her chicklets warm,
a spirit taking on distaff mystique.
Author notes
Spanish Sonnet
This variety of sonnet combines the Petrarchan Sonnet form as the octave, but uses the Rima Alterata, a variation of the Sicilian Sonnet, as the sestet.
The meter is normally comprised of ten syllables.
The rhyme scheme is .a.b.b.a...a.b.b.a....c.d.c.d.c.d.
The poem is divided into two sections by the two differing rhyme groups. A change from one rhyme group to another signifies a change in subject matter. This change occurs at the beginning of L9 and is called the volta, or "turn".
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A contest entry
- CONTEST: SPIRITUAL by Fransb by FransB.
750 points, ended September 15, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Thanks
for the entry. I'll comment over the weekend. Frans -
Beautiful sonnet, flowing with ease and wonderful rhyme. Heart-felt sentiments with which I agree totally. Well done!
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A splendid sonnet form here, flows so well in each part and a noticed change in pace with the rhyme... it just seemed to fit the words and meaning so very well and continue in a new rhythm with the rhyme change ...wonderful work...PK
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Beautifully done and the rhythm and rhyme in it are so easy to say, they roll easily.
C
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