Though I know,
the future will be different,
for all relationships are…
There is something,
within which I will accept no less…
For this goes to another time,
another place,
another relationship…
Though not perfect,
for none are…
Yet one that ended
so tragically…
Thus should be
the minimum standard,
by which we
should all strive…
For on the anniversary of special day,
on which our vows were exchanged,
as the years passed by,
we did something so simple,
yet so profound…
For during that special day,
each year,
one or the other of us,
would simply ask of the other…
“Honey, would you still?”
The answer was always
without thought, or reservation…
“Yes, would you?”
Which would always return…
”Of course”
Such simple words,
with such meaning
for in the years,
since those tragic days…
This thought has come often,
for I would ask myself,
if I had known,
all which would transpire…
All the pain,
heartache and loss
I would experience…
To this day,
I say…
“I would still”…
Therefore, in my future,
as others may come…
I shall accept no less of feeling,
though they may be different…
Of course…
For should something similar happen
as well it may,
the one left behind,
when asked the same question…
If you had known,
all which would happen…
Would you still?
That one would answer,
without thought or reservation…
“Yes, I would still”
© Jonathan Wikkins January 19, 2004
Revised February 27, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written January 19th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Give me your best of anything. No cutting poems please. new or pre write. by Misery into Melody.
700 points, ended May 16, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for a very rapid entry into my competition Jonathan. However all it has done for me, I'm afraid, is to highlight my own lack of clarity in writing the requirements.
I am looking for poems ABOUT oldpoetry and not just simply looking for some of your own oldpoetry, good as it may be.
Please feel free to leave it as an entry if you wish bearing this in mind.
Jim
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This one gave me goose bumps, yet how could love answer any other way? This piece shows the depth that love should hold. No matter the heartbreak, it is worth whatever time you have with them. No one has the promise of every tomorrow. Every person is different, has differing levels of strength and endurance. This is so very well written and holds so much truth that it truly brought me to tears.
Maddie -
Such heart felt words in this piece, that gives it that bit more beauty... Sometimes feelings don't change just circumstances that take awhile to get used too. A excellent write.
Natalia -
Omg this one is amazing truly breathtaking good work yet again I might have to add you to my favorite your talent is once shown again well I will defently be back to comment on you stuff but the bed is calling my name farwell for now.
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Flesh is like that.
Still and still and still the two would rush headlong into a throat cutting experience. Because to say otherwise would lessen the one to the other.
We are bound to stand beside any mistake we make or sit beside any glory we can find. -
This was really an unbelievable emotional poem. Really heartbreaking stuff, but I guess it a case of dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. I am sorry about your loss and I hope that all is getting better
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John, this write really hit home. My husband of nearly five years now asks this same question, receiving the same answer, and I ask it too, with the same answer. That is love! Pure and simple! We've decided to renew our wedding vows every ten years. But, your poetry caused me to ponder things I hadn't allowed into my mind, such as losing him in death. (Shudders) And, still, just like you stated, it would never change, the question, the answer, the completeness of our love, so much like yours. Tears This was beautiful, and I wish you all the happiness and love this world can offer. And, I feel your loss! My best to you! Walk on, the journey has only yet begun.--Kel Hugs
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awww this was so sweet, believing in love despite exprience well written, deeply thoughtful and wonderful. Well done!
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Yeah this was a really good poem it really hit home with me, especially this part Such simple words,
With such meaning
For in the years,
Since those tragic days
This thought has come often,
For I’d ask myself,
If I had known, all which would transpire
All the pain, heartache and loss I would experience
To this day,
I say “I would still”… Such great work -
I only hope that i can find that one who I can say this to!
Beautifully done my friend!
I did enjoy this very much!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
This was such a lovely write my friend. Your sadness of the loss of the one who would answer..." I would still" is profound. And yet...I feel optimism in your heart, that a love of that depth is still possible.
May that love enter your heart soon....
Hugs my friend...
Mary ann -
this was such A beautiful poem that you have written here.the word surely came from your heart.Yet I can see that you my friend are still lock in to the passed in some ways. this can sometime be a good thing and some time it can be a bad thing. Only the God has the Anwser. I know that if someone ask me that same quetion. I would say yes because I have learn even from the pain . that life has it own ways of let us find what is really what is for our best. not that I would want to go throught the pain again . just to know what i have learn . about given trust to quickly. I hope that you find someone that will make your heart sing from joy and happyness. For all of us need that. Good life to you my friend.And may the God be kind to you. as to the poem I think that it is a excellent poem. and I thank you for shareing it
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Indeed... quite the emotion invested in this piece. Then again, I've yet to read a piece penned by you that does not have the utmost part of your heart invested in it.
I rather feel as though I get a timid peek into a journal page in your life when I read your items. Something given to your readers in such a personal light, or even if it were based on fiction, is to be held gently in one's thoughts as they consider what may have brought it to us.
Nicely done as always .
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In matters of the heart...why should one settle for less? Very well done.
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Wow... Amazing emotion came across in waves. Awesome write.
~All 28~ -
Excellent work.
Yes,...and yes again...and a thousand times more...I would still. Loves like this don't come into our lives very often, and I'm not sure we ever recover when they are suddenly and tragically drawn from us. This muse has been silent for a while, but your circumstances have changed and she speaks again with a mighty force. I have a feeling there is more to come.
m -
Beautiful to love so deeply, just tragically beautiful, and to have such perspective on it.
Wonderful Mike...
rhi -
Wonderful. I have often wondered if i regret relationships, but I have not read many literary works that refer to the question. Great write.
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Now that is a emotional feeling poem!I think I almost started to cry,For I have also asked myself this and you did a wonderful job in bringing this to a poem!!Great outlook in life,I hope you always keep it!
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