never sure
of what i am doing.
i know my intent,
but it never seems
to come across
the way i mean it.
i don't know
the "right" moves
i don't know
how to play games
i can just be me
i just hope that's enough
Please tell me what you think
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I also really like how your straight up with your work. You have feelings and dont beat around the bush i love it good job sis
-Sean
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haha i might not beat around the bush in my poems, but i do totally hide... i mean, very few people know that i write, never mind know that it's on the web!! i hide... i wish i didn't sometimes, but it's scary to let people read your inner most thoughts and feelings, you know?
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Thanks Sean! love you!
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There is always a no bullshit approach to you and in turn your poetry, this is interesting, in the snese you have avoided the lush trappings of poetric cliche and just told it as it is.
Would like yto see you explore this feeling more, i feel this is a bit reserved, as if you are holding back. then again, for such a seemingly simple piece in appearence, it has a range of emotions, is this defensive? Confidence? True? It's great, i suspect it is a number of emotions, as ever J I like your style.
xxxxx
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Thanks James!! no bullshit is really all i know! i see no point in the games people play. it just makes a person question everything when no one can be real.
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