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Night of the Dance ( Silver )

Dance amongst the shadows

moon light throws its torch,

burning passion within flashes,

rising silhouettes.

 

Their music loud over murmurs,

whimpering,

touch naked spinning,

upon turntable of desires.

 

Craving kiss dissolved,

taste ever more powerful,

lingering,

in lips of painted gloss.

 

Flawless love,

ever beautiful,

two lovers unfurl,

and a  moment...... became the night.

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Option 3 ( Unknown artist )
40 to 60 words only

A contest entry

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    This poem is beautiful & sensual. The imagery is amazing and this poem filled with passion & love. I absolutely love the last stanza. Your take on the prompt and on your poem is Fantastic.

    good luck in the contest

    kat


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      September 10, 2008
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      Thank you for such an inspiring image to write for and your lovely comment xxx


  • daviscth silver member
    September 9, 2008

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    Ah sis...... This is a beautiful imagery filled poem. The last stanza really made the whole piece. I love it!!! Good luck...


  • onesugar gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    your words conjure up a wonderful picture of two lovers together, the ending just beautiful.
    Good luck Julie with this delightful write
    ~sugar~

  • Bob Fox
    September 9, 2008

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    Desires

    delicious thougths. Long legs drapped on strong shoulders. Twisting and turning bodies. Sweat glistening from tender breast. Love making and lust. Delicious and wanting. The hunger . does it last forever?

    • Reptile Lady gold member
      September 10, 2008
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      Aww thank you Bob
      Last forever, well we can but try and see x


  • aboomer silver member
    September 8, 2008

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    Beautiful! Great images and emotions, great title for this, great ending! This just all moves together so perfectly!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Wow!!! So beautiful & enticing...

    Such imagery expressed in your words here...
    Left me speechless & for a mo breathless...
    And the last line completes the flow with such grace 'and a moment...... became the night.'...
    Outstanding!!!
    Well done!!!


  • Swtpoetryman
    September 8, 2008

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    FLAWLESS, INDEED!

    Flawless love,
    ever beautiful,
    two lovers unfurl,
    and a moment...... became the night.

    A flawless piece - sweet and sensual, Julie - that fit option 3 to a T! Good Luck in this contest with this beautiful piece that was a joy to read this evening! I'm rather tired as Mondays always get me down when I have to work - so hopefully I will dream of a flawless love - as flawless as your beautiful legs - when I nod of to DREAMLAND - which may be very soon.
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    September 8, 2008

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    Written with your continued mastery of sensuality
    Love the last stanza--
    Well Done & Good luck in the contest!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 8, 2008
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    Nice work here

    Oh a never forgotten embrace I hear you


  • maralisa silver member
    September 8, 2008

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    wow this beautiful julie the imagery is sensual and passionate of two lovers twined from stanza one through to four good luck in the contest my friend marina x

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