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Rambo

Sweat dripping from his borough

Wet hair upon his head

no wonder he suvives the fight

who would want him dead?

Muscles protuding boldly

That killer look in his eye

Gee I want him badly

we'd make a great team

him and I

Me the blonde haired maiden

on a balcony in distress

Him below with arms spread wide

trying to impress

What a comic vision of Rambo

catching blonde haired jan

as she fly's with watching eyes

her dress out like a fan

Waiting arms he has unstretched

ready as I fall

but my hero misses me

and now I see

He's no hero after all

In fact I hate the begger

For in this hospital I stay

bandaged up from head to toe

whilst Rambo steals the day

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  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 15, 2008
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    I love the ending. I also enjoyed the fact that you created a whole new storyline that was not only amusing and lighthearted, but included some great imagery as well. Best of luck to you in the contest. I appreciate your taking the time and making the effort to enter. I hope it proved to be an enjoyable experience and challenge for you.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • wishintreeUK
    September 10, 2008

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    I enjoyed this, every woman's dream! A funny twist at the end, I envisioned the lady getting her man, yet did she heck.... good take on this movie poem.

    Well done

    Katie


  • Beret55 silver member
    September 8, 2008
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    Cute good twist on Rambo. hehe